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[sid] => 71518
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Just Another Sin
[time] => 2004-11-14 21:19:58
[hometext] => wrtitten during the act. emotional
[bodytext] => Seeing my reflection in the cold blade
oh, such a shame
Ive lost at this horrid thing called life
Its all a game.
Watching as my blood
drizzles out
i make no noise,
i do not scream
i do not shout
Oh such a beautiful,
miserable thing
The sweet feel of the tingeling
All of these emotions, gone
With a slash of the knife
Someday i`ll just take an end
to this pointless life
Im getting the courage now
Im stopping th pain within
When its all over
It`ll be labeled as "just another sin"
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 243
[topic] => 36
[informant] => everxsoxsweet
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 5
[ratings] => 1
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
)
Just Another Sin
Contributed by
everxsoxsweet
on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 09:19:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Seeing my reflection in the cold blade
oh, such a shame
Ive lost at this horrid thing called life
Its all a game.
Watching as my blood
drizzles out
i make no noise,
i do not scream
i do not shout
Oh such a beautiful,
miserable thing
The sweet feel of the tingeling
All of these emotions, gone
With a slash of the knife
Someday i`ll just take an end
to this pointless life
Im getting the courage now
Im stopping th pain within
When its all over
It`ll be labeled as "just another sin"
Copyright ©
everxsoxsweet
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2004-11-14 21:19:58]
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by savedbydeath on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 09:24:22 PM AEST
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Great write!I loved how u worded this,i know how u feel,i also loved the title it goes really good with the meaning,great write keep up the great work
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by sandy_poetrygodslove on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 09:25:50 PM AEST
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| I rated this poem a 5 because of how it was written. I liked the flow, the rhyme... but the topic snaws at me. I dont want you hurting and wanting to end it all. No problem is worth killing yourself over...god loves you and desires so desires to be with you.... give you a hug. LET HIM. |
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 09:28:58 PM AEST
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| excellent write. you have written and expressed this very well. |
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by brokenwings on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 12:26:44 AM AEST
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GREAT WRITE...dark but great keep up the work... some day the pain will end all on its own
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 10:27:35 PM AEST
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| i am probably gonna sound cruel here but here it is. what the hell is life so horrible for that you find relief in self mutilation. how pathetic is that, you listen to other people, saying you are worthless and instead of proving them wrong you prove them right. it's not a sin, but what the hell, really!!!!! don't waste our(other serious poets) time by posting just another suicidal self mutilation story about how life sucks and how you wanna die!!!!!!!! my life sucks, have you ever been homeless, beat up by cops for loitering, everyone you ever loved or loved you gone!!!!!!!!!!! yeah life sucks but we move on, it won't ever be perfect but you gotta make the best of a bad situation, please don't post anything like this ever again, i am not being mean, but if you only knew how many of these kinda poems get posted every day, it's pathetic. |
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by EVERxSOxSWEET on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 07:42:23 PM AEST
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| you have no idea what my life is like..if you dont like my poetry then dont read it. Simple. i write to get my feelings out so i dont feel so *****ty, and this site is for me and for my use, and i dont think you have any right to critisize my ways of relieving stress like that. yOu have no right to tell me not to post my poems. thats just plain rude, im sure there are people who dont like things you write, but they dont tell you to never write anything like that again. That was very inconsiderate. please dont ever comment on anything i ever write, ever again.Thanks. |
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by CAUGHTinAdream on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 08:37:59 PM AEST
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Ok this is for the person with the rude comment about this poem. by the way this girl is one of my best friends and u have no right to say that when you dont even know her. but anyways, if he doesnt like it then he can just go to a different site, bc obviously its a feeling and pain that a lot of people feel and its not gonna change and people are gonna write about what they feel, and a cookie for him bc his life is grand and hes not sad, but for regular people its not like that and he has no right to judge!
PS- I love u kay! Ur poem was great dont listen to people that say negative things like that |
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 04:26:13 PM AEST
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Kaylee, this was really good, don't let deadreckoning bring you down (Dane if you read this, sorry cuz, I'm siding with Kaylee on this one) but I was shocked to read that you tried this...You always seem happy, it was just a shock...I'm really glad to hear that you are dealing with it, and if you ever need help with anything, you know how to get a hold of me...
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 04:28:30 PM AEST
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Kaylee, this was very good, don't let deadreckoning pull you down (Dane if you read this, sorry cuz, but I'm siding with Kaylee on this one) I was really shocked to see that you actually did this, you just always seem so happy, and...I dunno it was just a shock, But if you ever need help with anything at all, you know how to get a hold of me...Very good write though
Mason |
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Re: Just Another Sin
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 03:19:43 PM AEST
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im sure life will deal you a good hand soon.
:-) |
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