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[aid] => mick
[title] => I'm truly alone...
[time] => 2004-11-13 00:12:13
[hometext] => I'm just trying to take full advantage of this depressed state... another sonnet... yay! And it ends with the title... again
[bodytext] => I walk by them, in the halls, down the street,
Dodging, swerving, just trying to get by,
Can't see their faces, just look at my feet,
It's not that I'm scared, and not that I'm shy.
To me they aren't people, they are not real,
Just obstacles, just hurdles in my way,
They don't notice me, think that I can't feel,
I could make them notice, but it's too risque.
I'd rather be alone, there is less pain,
So I push through the crowd, eyes never meet,
Just sit on the bus, and the subway train,
Just sit alone, unnoticed in my seat.
Don't get any notes, don't answer the phone,
Just cry in my bed, I'm truly alone...
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 13
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
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I'm truly alone...
Contributed by
Unheard_Mute
on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 12:12:13 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I walk by them, in the halls, down the street,
Dodging, swerving, just trying to get by,
Can't see their faces, just look at my feet,
It's not that I'm scared, and not that I'm shy.
To me they aren't people, they are not real,
Just obstacles, just hurdles in my way,
They don't notice me, think that I can't feel,
I could make them notice, but it's too risque.
I'd rather be alone, there is less pain,
So I push through the crowd, eyes never meet,
Just sit on the bus, and the subway train,
Just sit alone, unnoticed in my seat.
Don't get any notes, don't answer the phone,
Just cry in my bed, I'm truly alone...
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Unheard_Mute
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by Unheard_Mute on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 12:23:12 AM AEST
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| Yeah... I mean truly... |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by veenu on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 12:54:17 AM AEST
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nice......................alone is something very cruel to man ,but just find the one who can crush this lonelyness...............
good write
keep sharing
naveen
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 01:02:44 AM AEST
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| wow, i love it cuddlez :P.. anotha great write! |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 01:12:29 AM AEST
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| Great piece. Very moving. I've been there before. Much peace to you. |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by Onslaught on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 03:14:41 AM AEST
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Life will more than likely not get any better.
No matter what any of the others say.
But if it does than good for you.
Good poem and I especially like your signature. |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by DesperateSoul on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 04:49:00 AM AEST
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| I can totallt understand the way you feel, it's like why even bother to know people sometimes,it always brings in the pain again!! You express yourself well! Great Write!! Keep Posting!! |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by EternalNight4x on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 10:40:52 AM AEST
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| very deep and expressive poem...i feel the same way as you |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by subchild on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 02:06:41 PM AEST
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| wah wah wah...Suck it up loser |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:06:14 PM AEST
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excellent write. well there are worse things in life than being alone, its just perspective. i need to get some....
you wrote this well, what a surprise eh? you actually use punctuation. youve got a leg up over my poetry =] and you say you hardly get any comments...you get more than i got when i first started out here!
you used emotional powerfully here, i love a writer than can express themselves that way. but i always wonder is it our lives that cause the emotions or do we feel the writers? interesante, no? |
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by Broken_Skin on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 01:06:19 PM AEST
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I to like to end poems with their titles =)
This was cool
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Re: I'm truly alone...
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by blackholesun on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 04:24:03 PM AEST
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| i have felt that way,low self esteem sucks its a hard thing to get over,i had problems looking in the mirror,but now i still let my hair hang in my face,i hope that you have better luck helping yourself to believe that you dont give a ***** what others think about you. |
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