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[aid] => mick
[title] => Suffering Depression
[time] => 2004-11-09 05:52:12
[hometext] => This is differernt in relation to my other poems, but this write was after a little something... and argument let's call it :) But yeah, sometimes I wonder why so much poetry involves suicide..
[bodytext] => Suffering from depression,
What would you know?
Blood running down my fingertips,
Sweat dripping down my forehead,
I press pen onto paper,
Desperately writing my will
The end is not far from now,
Not much longer to go,
I feel light as my paper flies,
And my ink pen dries,
Crawling to the doorstep,
My blood red as rose,
I open a door to my world,
A world of hate and pain,
One last look at the beautiful sunset,
My last touch of the soft sand,
I lay on the beach awaiting my end,
Hoping to be washed away, never to return
Suffering from depression,
What would you know?
Drowning in your arrogance,
I hope this death awakens you.
Author's Note: People who commit suicide usually don't prepare a will ;)
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 212
[topic] => 36
[informant] => THORN
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 17
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
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Suffering Depression
Contributed by
THORN
on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 05:52:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Suffering from depression,
What would you know?
Blood running down my fingertips,
Sweat dripping down my forehead,
I press pen onto paper,
Desperately writing my will
The end is not far from now,
Not much longer to go,
I feel light as my paper flies,
And my ink pen dries,
Crawling to the doorstep,
My blood red as rose,
I open a door to my world,
A world of hate and pain,
One last look at the beautiful sunset,
My last touch of the soft sand,
I lay on the beach awaiting my end,
Hoping to be washed away, never to return
Suffering from depression,
What would you know?
Drowning in your arrogance,
I hope this death awakens you.
Author's Note: People who commit suicide usually don't prepare a will ;)
Copyright ©
THORN
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2004-11-09 05:52:12]
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 05:56:48 AM AEST
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| Written very visual and intense, a graphic tale unfolding, awesome use of words to describe what you want the reader to feel, beautifully composed cool poem. |
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 06:02:07 AM AEST
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I was beginning to wonder where u have been lol. but there u were writing another beautiful poem for us. Keep that ink flowing and I hope to read more of ur poems soon.
Hugs,
Jane |
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by THORN on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 06:20:51 AM AEST
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Dragon, your speech is actually inspiring LOL
Jane, I know! *hug* I've been away for quite some time, but now I'm back! =D I might not be able to drop by that often tho...
Btw, have you written any new poems yourself?
Anyway! Thanks everybody for reading and btw, this only took me 2 minutes to write, Jane lol
When you're full of emotion, there's only one way to get it out without wrecking anything... ink and paper ;)
Cheers,
-XRaye
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 06:25:29 AM AEST
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Well, gotta tell ya I read this write then went to yo page and didn't stop till I read um all now I'm back at this one and I'll comment.
U r a terrific writer as all of your writes had me mezmerized.
Ya know I've often wonder the same thing here and this one says a lot.
luv, huggs, keep writing,
emyy |
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by THORN on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 06:33:07 AM AEST
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LMAO, you read all of them?! The rest suck, the were all requests except for C.O.T.H.
Anyways, thanks so much for reviewing!
This place gives you instant results, that's what I love about it lol
Cheers,
-XRaye |
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 08:47:14 AM AEST
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a beautiful and sad suicide write, full of expression,
takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 08:54:06 AM AEST
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This took 2 minutes, your absoultely mad lol. And u said im a good writer *Still cant belive raye wrote this in 2 min*
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by LEMMEN on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 04:10:06 AM AEST
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Great write i enjoyed it very much thanks for sharing.
~DENNIS~ |
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 03:36:41 AM AEST
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Dear Thorn,
I'm so sorry that you have suffered in this way. Are you just kidding us? This is really very serious. I understand that those who take their own life really have no other choice. In other wards they are so sick, the one instinct that our Creator gave us that is so very strong is to survive. When a person can go against that and take their own life, they are deeply disturbed for sure.
You write very well, I enjoyed reading this.
Warm love
consue |
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Re: Suffering Depression
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by Live2Die on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 02:30:58 PM AEST
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| Very good, and very visual. I get extremely clear images of whats happening. And I think alot of poetry involves suicide etc. because it's easier to write about than happiness. |
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