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You were the one who messed with my head,
But not anymore you are no longer alive,
Into death I made you take a dive.

I have wanted to kill you for so long,
My bullets have longed to whistle their song,
Night after night I have wept over the pain you caused,
So from breathing I wanted to give you a permanent pause.

I didn’t even shed a single tear,
Something died with you & that was my fear,
So I couldn’t be happier that you inhaled your last,
Breath as now you are not my present, but past.

You laughed at me for too many days,
I knew I’d bring death your way,
I can’t help but smile & let out a little laugh
As now in the devils water you will take a bath.

I pray that never will you be at rest,
To make you suffer was m only quest,
Now my mission has been accomplished,
To you a heavy dose of death has been dished.

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Bang Bang

Contributed by pixie on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 01:04:25 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

Bang, bang I shoot you dead,
You were the one who messed with my head,
But not anymore you are no longer alive,
Into death I made you take a dive.

I have wanted to kill you for so long,
My bullets have longed to whistle their song,
Night after night I have wept over the pain you caused,
So from breathing I wanted to give you a permanent pause.

I didn’t even shed a single tear,
Something died with you & that was my fear,
So I couldn’t be happier that you inhaled your last,
Breath as now you are not my present, but past.

You laughed at me for too many days,
I knew I’d bring death your way,
I can’t help but smile & let out a little laugh
As now in the devils water you will take a bath.

I pray that never will you be at rest,
To make you suffer was m only quest,
Now my mission has been accomplished,
To you a heavy dose of death has been dished.

Copyright Â© pixie ... [ 2004-11-08 13:04:25]
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Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 01:08:49 PM AEST
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Yay! Go Krissie!
I like this hunni...but tell me..does this have any truth in it?
I hope not.
Another fabulous write.
*hugs* Phil xxx

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by Stitch on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 01:18:02 PM AEST
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Ouch! Sounds like a write you needed for the catharsis. Well done.
Stitch

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by EternalNight4x on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 02:15:04 PM AEST
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wow that's really good, I liek your ryhming and that poem does have a lot fo truth to it...wouldn't it be awesome to actual be able to do it without rotting in jail the rest of your life lol.....

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by deathdrop on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 03:24:14 PM AEST
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oooh!
an angry poem if it's true, i hope this venting has helped you... and how are things now?
i hope they're getting better.
*hugs*
from rosie.

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by CrimsonTears on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 03:58:47 PM AEST
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I like this alot....great job...very powerful...

Lots of Love
CrimsonTears

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by BrandySwanson on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 05:55:18 PM AEST
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I just love the ryhming in this poem lots of angry feeling as well. Great job and well written. take care pixie and it was a pleasure being able to read all your wonderful and terrific poems. I enjoyed reading them.

Your #1 fan
Brandy

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by Willofree on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 06:19:21 PM AEST
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Poetry is a great outlet for expressing anger or hatred. We can deal with all kinds or unfinished business throuogh this mode of expression.

You did a fabulous job of expressing your disdain for this person.

Good write, I hope it brings healing
Willofree

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by pander on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 06:57:22 PM AEST
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Another nice piece, full of emotion.

What more can I say?

Luv,

Pander
xxx

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 07:07:37 PM AEST
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Very emotional write.... Good venting.....Hope all is well....
Hugs
Jenni

Re: Bang Bang (User Rating: 1 )
by girltranscended on Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 11:31:59 PM AEST
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This was great.
I have a certain someone I would like to make suffer as well...
"my bullets have longed to whistle their song"
is an awesome line!

I luv the strength of your voice :)

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