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[aid] => mick
[title] => Hunted
[time] => 2004-10-27 08:05:45
[hometext] => hi i'm rosa its my first time on the site please comment on my poetry..thanks :)
[bodytext] => The thunder of hooves.
The cry of voices.
This way they shout.
A flash of red.
Running so fast,
run my little one.
Run like you have never run before,
through hedge and fence,
thicket and brush.
The barking of the hounds
gets louder and louder.
Tally ho the voices cry,
nearer and nearer,
the hounds catch up.
He is out of breath..
cant run no more,no more,no more
He is no more.
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[associated] =>
[topicname] => oops
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Hunted
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roza
on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 08:05:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
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The thunder of hooves.
The cry of voices.
This way they shout.
A flash of red.
Running so fast,
run my little one.
Run like you have never run before,
through hedge and fence,
thicket and brush.
The barking of the hounds
gets louder and louder.
Tally ho the voices cry,
nearer and nearer,
the hounds catch up.
He is out of breath..
cant run no more,no more,no more
He is no more.
Copyright ©
roza
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2004-10-27 08:05:45]
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Re: Hunted
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 08:12:27 AM AEST
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The ritual fox hunting is cruel, but the nI cant really talk I hunt rabbits and hares as they are pests. So guess Ive just contradicted myself, lol.
Beautifully written poem, with flow and rythem and a good storyline, clear and vivid images, and feelings, cool poem over all, oh and welcome to the site.
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Re: Hunted
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 09:10:42 AM AEST
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Well, I quite enjoyed that poem. You keep writing and I will keep reading. Welcome to YPDC.
Smiles,
Rita |
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Re: Hunted
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by cauchy3 on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 09:17:26 AM AEST
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you are women sexism or calli-girl-doms
Why not no more :she is no more |
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Re: Hunted
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by bernard on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 09:17:58 AM AEST
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| Great Poem. By the way I too hate fox hunting and any other kind of hunting. Welcome to the YPDC Your poem is worth 5/5 top marks. from bernard. |
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Re: Hunted
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by a_bear on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 10:28:51 AM AEST
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| the poem is startling..I feel as if I am the fox..poor little thing. the sport should be outlawed...good write though. |
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Re: Hunted
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by x_midnight_x on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 11:42:01 AM AEST
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your poem was very expressive and full of talent,
empathy for the poor fox,
kindest regards and blessings,
welcome to Y.P.D.C,
i'm looking forward to many more reads !!
well done,
midnight x |
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Re: Hunted
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 04:52:48 PM AEST
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Wonderful write....Great imagery...
Welcome to YODC..the BEST site on the net...
Jenni |
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Re: Hunted
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:52:56 PM AEST
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Good first write. I look forward to reading more of your work.
:-) |
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Re: Hunted
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by THUGGIN4REAL on
Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 03:59:09 PM AEST
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| GOOD POEM, I DO HUNT , BUT NOT ANIMALES. ANYWAYS GOOD WORK. |
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Re: Hunted
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by inoc on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 06:20:39 AM AEST
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Hi and welcome...roza
I was brought up on the farm and hunted rabbits,emus and Kangaroos....there were plagues back then....
...but.....
now I live in the town I can't handle the thought...
anyway ....nice write and continue writing...
cheers!~ |
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Re: Hunted
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 13th April 2005 @ 07:12:35 AM AEST
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| Good imagery..well written..it captivates the reader..venkat |
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Re: Hunted
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by boobiepeach on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:35:44 AM AEST
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great poem. now is it about the obvious or is it a metaphore. a wonderful write.
inflicts a sweet pain in your side.
peach |
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Re: Hunted
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by Dorkfish on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 11:07:45 AM AEST
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| Good poem. I like the metaphores. Great job for your first poem and welcome! |
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Re: Hunted
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by JenJen on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 02:16:09 PM AEST
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welcome to YPDC well done keep up the gd work
jen
xxxx |
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Re: Hunted
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by Kamal on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 12:16:20 PM AEST
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Don't let the big white man catch him okay because who else would running away from someone in the forest if it wasn't a black man.. lol
don't you get it
Great poem I just get a little cartried away... |
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Re: Hunted
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by JGB on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 11:23:48 AM AEST
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| Good write. I like this. I feel for the fox. |
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Re: Hunted
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 11th April 2006 @ 11:12:10 AM AEST
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This was a great poem. I liked this alot. It was well written and everything..
Take care
christina |
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Re: Hunted
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 4th August 2007 @ 11:12:57 PM AEST
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Great start to your time here.
I await the next one.
Steve |
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