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Without Any Sin
Contributed by
essentially9
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Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 08:31:42 PM in AEST
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Without Any Sin
The black rose of dawn
Has dew cascading down
The stem with thorns that have drawn
The blood of every foe till now
The white rose has shown
That it will not suffer the black rose
It shall transcend and not be forsaken
With not having its blood taken
It shall live another day to give
A new meaning to not give in to sin
The crimson rose of tears
Symbolizes all of the fears
From bleeding to live another day
When it wasn't worth the pain
The black rose has drawn its blood
Leaving it a pale white rose
That will not bleed anymore
Because it has nothing more to give
It's left without any sin
And has transcended the pain within
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by TheVoice on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 09:06:54 PM AEST (User
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VERY VERY beautiful write. I am a crimson rose. This is such an OUTSTANDING write.
Thank you so much.
The Voice
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 11:02:42 PM AEST (User
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Wow I was drawn into this poem from the
very first line and held until the final
reverbrations faded away in my head. To put it
simply I loved this and I hate to get religious
on you, but the last few lines reminded me of
Jesus wiping our sins... I don't know if you
meant it that way or even if your a Christian
but that's what i got. Beautiful poem...
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by girish on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 07:53:15 AM AEST (User
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nice write. i have written poems in metaphoric way but this resembles a good metaphor style
thank you |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by skyblumoon on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 01:05:59 PM AEST (User
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Wow! what power and beauty.
Blu |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by jaeann on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 01:13:49 AM AEST (User
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because it has nothing more to give......what a beautiful beautiful piece......... |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 12:53:42 AM AEST (User
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wow i loved it, its so true. you did well with this i love it alot it fits alot with my thinking
SM |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by KurdtBeantheWIKKED on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 05:55:39 PM AEST (User
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It reminds me of emily dickenson and I dont
know why but its like a place I want to be.
Maybe cuz im weird like that
anywho, good work
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by Unheard_Mute on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 12:16:40 AM AEST (User
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good one, I liked it, meaningful... but I still like black roses... |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by assassinatorgirl on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 11:13:27 PM AEST (User
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wonderful. very deep. gj!
cizo ^-^ |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Sunday, 19th December 2004 @ 07:13:36 AM AEST (User
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I kept picturing a white rose splattered with blood. Isn't that the picture of us all?
Quite a write. Glad I checked out some of your poetry today.
Stitch |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by faith_my_eyes on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:27:31 PM AEST (User
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That must be the most beautiful image I have read today. I love your allegory of roses for Christ, sin, and redemption. How incedible... breathtaking, beautfiul work... glory to God. |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:31:19 PM AEST (User
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This is incredibly beacutiful E9.
Truly...
There are so many amazing images in this. I am left speachless.
A true work of art..
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Without Any Sin
(User Rating: 1 ) by Sinned on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 09:02:59 AM AEST (User
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With all these comments what can I add ?
Everything seems to have been said.
You are good I hope you are not wasting time.
Most everything you write touches this heart of mine.
You are a very good writer
I wish You would be contacted by some famous editor.
Sinned
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