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[aid] => mick
[title] => Lights
[time] => 2004-10-24 06:54:46
[hometext] => This is the first poem I wrote, I hope you all like it (I am only 9)
[bodytext] =>
Every time I sleep at night
All the stars shine so bright
Everyone sees the light
The light of god
The light of god
People stare at the pretty lights
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 165
[topic] => 43
[informant] => footiebabe
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[ratings] => 4
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[associated] =>
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Lights
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footiebabe
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Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 06:54:46 AM in AEST
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Every time I sleep at night
All the stars shine so bright
Everyone sees the light
The light of god
The light of god
People stare at the pretty lights
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2004-10-24 06:54:46]
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Re: Lights
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 06:57:24 AM AEST
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Awww how cute is this poem... for a 9 year old youre a good poet lol. Well anyways i like you're poem alot and thanks for sharing.
Jane |
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Re: Lights
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 07:06:29 AM AEST
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Aww this is just adorable! And brilliant for a 9 year old. Cute *grins*
Take Care
- Becca |
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Re: Lights
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by Dawny on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 07:15:21 AM AEST
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Michelle actually wrote this for school, I had it framed and put on her wall. I'm slightly biased as her Mum, but I think she has alot of talent.
Well done Michelle
Love Dawny (aka Mum) |
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Re: Lights
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 09:01:21 AM AEST
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| For one so young you have an awesome talent for mezmerising, and creating visually clear images, leaving the reader with no doubt what so ever in what you want then to feel and see, You have a bright future ahead of you and I hope it is one that will make you happy. Beautiful poem. |
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Re: Lights
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 10:48:04 AM AEST
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This is lovely, Michelle! I love your vision of night... gentle and so positive. Nicely done!
Oh! I hope you keep writing poetry for years and years....
SNM |
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Re: Lights
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by AliB on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 11:02:50 AM AEST
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Well done Michelle,
This is great for your first poem, you give the reader the impression you are much older by the way you write. Bet your mum's real proud. Can't wait to see more from you, I'll show shelby later, you might inspire her lol.
Hopefully see you soon,
Love Ali xx |
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Re: Lights
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 12:39:27 PM AEST
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This gave me goosebumps. I almost want to cry at the wisdom of your innocence. Hold on to your talent-- and your youth. This is beautiful, and serene.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea |
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Re: Lights
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 01:43:44 PM AEST
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excellent, you are talented and blessed, writing beyond your years, keep 'em coming:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Lights
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 04:21:47 PM AEST
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Beautiful write...Keep the ink flowing...you show great potential..
Jenni |
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Re: Lights
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by Trisha on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 10:12:02 AM AEST
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| I Liked This. It's Was Joy Reading This Poem. |
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