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[aid] => mick
[title] => The Dance
[time] => 2004-10-23 13:35:13
[hometext] => *** I was NOT going to write today (I have a lot of other stuff to do)... but, when confronted with a blank screen - I couldn't help myself. This... fell out. I'm sure it's not perfect... but I need to stop before I get completely carried away again. ***
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They've quieted now
Slipping back behind the curtain
To reorganize themselves
To pick up the cues,
Pulsing out with each beat
Of my heart
So they know, so they are
Dancing to the appropriate tune -
Flailing wildly in the rush
Of confused emotion
Or sweeping gracefully
Though my mind
As love is quietly considered
No matter, they matter
Always, as they dance
For their desperate inclination
To be consistently moving
To my own internal music
I understand them, as
They do me
And so,
I wait for them
To fall again into formation
And to step forward
In front of the curtain
Where I can see them
In some new pattern
Telling me everything
Showing me what they learned
By listening, by dancing
They make me want to
Move with them
Because they matter
Even if I can't hear the music
Always, I surrender myself
To their power, swept away
By their song, my song
And by dancing, I begin
Then to understand, as
They do.
Later, sometimes much later,
When the dance has long since ended
And the words are set out on the page
Then, and only then,
Am I able to hear the music
As they do.
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[counter] => 321
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[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[score] => 50
[ratings] => 10
[editpoem] => 1
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The Dance
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 01:35:13 PM in AEST
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They've quieted now
Slipping back behind the curtain
To reorganize themselves
To pick up the cues,
Pulsing out with each beat
Of my heart
So they know, so they are
Dancing to the appropriate tune -
Flailing wildly in the rush
Of confused emotion
Or sweeping gracefully
Though my mind
As love is quietly considered
No matter, they matter
Always, as they dance
For their desperate inclination
To be consistently moving
To my own internal music
I understand them, as
They do me
And so,
I wait for them
To fall again into formation
And to step forward
In front of the curtain
Where I can see them
In some new pattern
Telling me everything
Showing me what they learned
By listening, by dancing
They make me want to
Move with them
Because they matter
Even if I can't hear the music
Always, I surrender myself
To their power, swept away
By their song, my song
And by dancing, I begin
Then to understand, as
They do.
Later, sometimes much later,
When the dance has long since ended
And the words are set out on the page
Then, and only then,
Am I able to hear the music
As they do.
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2004-10-23 13:35:13]
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Re: The Dance
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 01:42:48 PM AEST
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Shhhhhhhhhh rest now gentle children of the stars,
Soon enough it will be time again to dance, to create... |
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Re: The Dance
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by holderofthestone on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 02:07:56 PM AEST
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wow...
"Even if I can’t hear the music
Always, I surrender myself" I really liked this silent. strong words with a soft touch of sadness. A great read. A++++
hope that all is well.
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Re: The Dance
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 05:16:48 PM AEST
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truely beautiful and so gently written, it warmed my heart, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: The Dance
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by a_bear on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 05:40:43 PM AEST
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| I do not pretend to understand..but it doesn't matter because it's beautiful anyway. |
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Re: The Dance
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by venkat on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 02:20:45 AM AEST
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| I could get gentle feeling while reading this beautiful work..thank you dear friend for your heart warming comment on my poem..love and blessings from my poetic soul.:-) venkat |
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Re: The Dance
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by Kie on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 11:09:15 AM AEST
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It is a melody that is unforgettable isn't it?
It is in those quiet moments you hear the synchronization, that can be so easily never felt.
You have alot of depth, an active mind, a pen that can write emotion in the form of poetry-- and this is breathtakingly beautiful to read.
Kie |
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Re: The Dance
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 02:55:41 PM AEST
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Damn SNM! You are so bloody creative. I do so enjoy your work.
It's incredible to read. Takes me away to another dimension
almost. This was lovely.
Just lovely!
~Breezy |
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Re: The Dance
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by emystar on
Sunday, 24th October 2004 @ 06:56:49 PM AEST
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Good write and pants an awesome picture.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: The Dance
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by a_bear on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 10:05:35 AM AEST
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| this is beautiful..I think I understand. Sometimes, I enter a manic phase (I think that's what it is) The words just come out..everything in a rush. For some reason it's almost always iambic petameter.. It drags me out of bed, no matter the time...I have to get it down. Then I feel spent..or exhilerated. Your poetry captures it in a beautiful way. :-*) I have a poem on now which is being read and getting no comments..I don't know why? It's called Reflections..if you get time would you have a look? ty. |
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Re: The Dance
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 12:56:33 PM AEST
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> stares at page in unmitigated awe ...
>rereads an indeterminate amount of times ...
The monitor seems as frozen as my eyes, upon the ideas captured by this dance.
> is simply amazed, filled with artistic revelation and an ever increasing respect for the dance.
With a nod of understanding, a hint of a smile, and a wink of acknowledgement ... wanders off in search of fire. |
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Re: The Dance
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 07:17:57 PM AEST
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This poem flows beautifully....like a dance. It is very rich in descriptive images. I admire you talent for writing a non rhyming poem. I have little experience with non rhyming poetry... I need to give it a try.
This read was inspiration for me
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Re: The Dance
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by Luinil on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 12:47:46 PM AEST
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| very beautiful and creative as always * |
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Re: The Dance
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 07:38:04 PM AEST
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Vivid and poetic. Nice work, very nice. I like the way you worded this.
Slàn
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Re: The Dance
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 09:27:55 AM AEST
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Gentle...thats the perfect word. This leaves me with a warm, happy feeling.
Absolutely beautiful in every way :o)
Roses at your feet
Larry |
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Re: The Dance
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 06:31:27 AM AEST
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I can almost see it...almost hear the music.
And it is beautiful.
I adore the way you write hunni.
I wish I could create like you do, no rhyme, but a perfect flow.
The words almost seem to complement, to complete each other.
And amazing write, as always.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: The Dance
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by ladydp2000 on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 07:07:50 PM AEST
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| Very nice write! love the reading... |
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Re: The Dance
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by namesaretaken on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 11:05:02 PM AEST
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How did the concept of dance begin? Both strange and beautiful it is
It was said before me and I will repeat because of its truth--It was a very gentle poem--It put a warm smile to my face
Thank you
Nat |
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Re: The Dance
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 03:16:57 AM AEST
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wow! great write shall we then? (dance) we should form a YPDC conga!
johnny |
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Re: The Dance
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by n2dep2care on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 10:31:16 PM AEST
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Very beautiful. I love the style and the flow. Well done!
Laurie |
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Re: The Dance
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 11:46:27 PM AEST
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Oh My God!!!! this was so beautiful, i was hoping to see diversity from you and i have. Bravo, bravo, bravo. a delicious slice of poetry, screaming for attention and getting it. a great piece, made from a great poet/ess??
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Re: The Dance
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by Taurusgem1 on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 06:43:07 PM AEST
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| Again and excellent poem. I look forward to all that you write |
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Re: The Dance
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st May 2006 @ 03:45:41 AM AEST
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*stares in amazement*
You are such an incredible poetess.
So inspiring.
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Re: The Dance
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th October 2009 @ 01:37:05 AM AEST
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| Awesome, this was today's mystery poem. Words do have a way of gathering. |
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