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Every Step Further Away
Contributed by
Black13
on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 04:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I could have sworn
that it was heaven
I was touching.
It whispered gently to me
promising forever and eternity.
Kissed goodbyes in weepy delight
everytime you departed from us.
Dreams never touch upon
youthful nights
sensually entwined around one another.
Twisting slumber in shared breaths.
A time
when I still felt alive.
One day you said goodbye
and held me near and tender.
The tears spoke for you
and
washed away my colors.
But eyes that see only
in seven shades of gray
are always dry.
So many steps alone now
further than I've ever been before
from the man you swore
to see in me.
Copyright ©
Black13
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2004-10-18 04:05:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Every Step Further Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kie-Kie on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 05:23:19 AM AEST (User
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Awe Jeff...I'm sorry you feel this way
I know the feeling though...it gets better through time...
Love ya and Take Care,
~Kiela~ |
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Re: Every Step Further Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 07:12:21 AM AEST (User
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I know this, too. You've been affected very deeply. The old adage..."when something seems to good..." etc. Oh, this has got some lovely (picked up that word from Phil) lines that really convey the feeling so strongly. A very nice piece of work.
Stitch |
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Re: Every Step Further Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by a_bear on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 11:00:19 AM AEST (User
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beautiful. Seeing in 7 shades of gray.. |
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Re: Every Step Further Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ronald on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:12:57 PM AEST (User
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(((((HUGSSS))))) brother... I know how it feels to be in this situation. But one advice I would like to give you is, move on and stay strong. (((((HUGGGSSSS) (tightly)
Anyway, love this write a lot. It's such and emotional poem and I feel like crying to share your sorrows pal... take care pal, ok? |
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Re: Every Step Further Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlitAngel on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:59:24 PM AEST (User
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I cannot express how much I love this... Jeff... it makes me so nostalgic, and then I read on and suddenly I'm downright depressed. The first bit instantly reminded me of a relationship I was in, like, 2 1/2 years ago... why is it everything I read of yours seems to have been written about my life? |
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Re: Every Step Further Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 07:22:51 AM AEST (User
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Omg. This is too sad...
God Jeff, I'm so sorry you've been through this.
I hope one day, you will see the colours again.
There is nothing else I could really say. Nothing that would help.
A good write Jeff.
Phil xxx |
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Re: Every Step Further Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 02:32:43 AM AEST (User
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All I can say is, powerful. I wasn't even expecting that last stanza, but it drove home the tone of this piece. Truly excellent writing.
And I wish you well, as always.
Andrew |
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