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[aid] => mick
[title] => Goodbye love...
[time] => 2004-10-12 12:05:07
[hometext] => Just sometihng that fell out of my very tired mind last night, while i was thinking of somebody back home.. It's kinda rough, I'll do it better when i get home. (This is different, so any criticism appreciated)
[bodytext] => I sit-- afraid of my shadow,
And I know it is because you are not around,
And there is nothing, my heart is hollow,
Except for reminders of your laughter, your words, echoing loud.
And I know I am holding onto false hope,
Our love became dormant long ago,
But I hate this space, where you used to be by my side,
I still wonder why...
(I have too many questions to write...)
(Too many words that fill my mind...)
I wonder if you are thinking of me,
Writing a letter to love, writing these things,
Words held dear, never heard by your ears,
A thousand words, for each million tears.
And I wonder if I will be alone forever,
Or will we be alone together...
So far apart, but hands intertwined,
Spanning the miles, in each others lives...
But...I guess it never helped anybody, asking why...
Goodbye love...
**********
Why are you there, when I am here alone,
Is it hard to write a letter, or to even use the phone.
Am I the only one, who thinks--who feels this way,
Am I the only one who is afraid?
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[score] => 10
[ratings] => 2
[editpoem] => 0
[associated] =>
[topicname] => LostLove
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Goodbye love...
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 12:05:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I sit-- afraid of my shadow,
And I know it is because you are not around,
And there is nothing, my heart is hollow,
Except for reminders of your laughter, your words, echoing loud.
And I know I am holding onto false hope,
Our love became dormant long ago,
But I hate this space, where you used to be by my side,
I still wonder why...
(I have too many questions to write...)
(Too many words that fill my mind...)
I wonder if you are thinking of me,
Writing a letter to love, writing these things,
Words held dear, never heard by your ears,
A thousand words, for each million tears.
And I wonder if I will be alone forever,
Or will we be alone together...
So far apart, but hands intertwined,
Spanning the miles, in each others lives...
But...I guess it never helped anybody, asking why...
Goodbye love...
**********
Why are you there, when I am here alone,
Is it hard to write a letter, or to even use the phone.
Am I the only one, who thinks--who feels this way,
Am I the only one who is afraid?
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 12:07:59 PM AEST
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Awwww Phil, this is so sad and moving, *big hugs* you know where you are if you need me hun,
takecare
pixe xx |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by faith_my_eyes on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 01:14:26 PM AEST
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| excellent stylistic elements, it is very lyrical |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 01:52:33 PM AEST
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Wonderful images and concepts here. Such overwhelming sadness portrayed so vividly. You are very deep, my friend. A lovely write.
(Not just saying that, either.)
Stitch
(who is very impressed) |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 01:56:11 PM AEST
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I stand in complete agreeance with Stitch !!
Very deep !! Nice write Phil.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 01:59:28 PM AEST
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oh Phil.....
If you were goig for emotional...you got me here.
The form is diffrent for you, yes, but it flows well for the piece.
Loneliness, pain, some anger?
homesick.......?...........HUG |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 02:46:01 PM AEST
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Oh Phil.... I'm in complete agreement with the others. Of course you knew I would be.
This is so incredibly touching. Gosh... I don't even have words enough. It's.... moving - in a gentle, melancholy sort of way. If I had read this while we were hanging out together - I'm quite sure that I would have looked over at you and just started crying... and then.... given you a great big hug.
Beautiful - just beautiful.
Hugs and love,
SNM |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by Dorian on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 02:57:37 PM AEST
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i started 2 read this, ok dark ink, and flowing verry nice, and then bang, " i hate this space " wow, so i read on, but found my self going back 2 that line, i finished reading it, beautifuly done verry vivid, but most of all, that line, a most unique way of saying i'm lonely that ive heard in long time, btw, that line has a verry frightning conotation 2 it, hope things
get better 4 u . . . Dorian : ) |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by brew on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 04:25:36 PM AEST
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| So saddening.........to love and long, can hurt.especially when they are not in the reach and can be touched. Felt write.~ |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by Spazzo on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 08:53:22 PM AEST
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This is sad moving, but a great write.
Spazzo |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by buchi on
Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 04:05:48 PM AEST
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| one of the finest imaginable of finales- |
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Re: Goodbye love...
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by Tanmaya on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 02:04:47 AM AEST
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Why didn't I read this before?
I loved it.
'And I wonder if I will be alone forever,
Or will we be alone together...
So far apart, but hands intertwined,
Spanning the miles, in each others lives...'
Awesome!
Very deep, very touching.
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