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[sid] => 66957
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => threesome twosome alone?
[time] => 2004-10-11 10:54:20
[hometext] => I hate this poem because it is an awful reminder and because it is bad, but i felt like posting it anyway
[bodytext] => I hate her
I really hate her
she slept with my husband
did she really
yes
i can't believe it
but it is true
i sat there watching
yes
i sat there
the whole time
watching
my husband on top of her
her on top of him
and them in every which way
me
watching
i went to smoke a ciggarette
you left the room
i did
i went and smoked and thought
thought about what was in my bed
my husband and her
her and my husband
upside down
twisted around
i didn't know what it meant
when three turned into two
i sat there and watched
wondering
now what am i supposed to do
so i left and smoked a ciggarette
you said that already
i went and smoked and thought about
what was in my bed
four condoms later
tired eyed and satisfied
she asked for a ride home
so we all said good bye
and i sat there and watched
as they walked out the door
i sat and i watched and wondered
how did three turn to two
I sat and thought
now what to do
what to do...
so I went in the kitchen
looked around
why
just thinking
thinking how three turned to two
so anyway
i went to the kitchen
and picked it up
what
i don't need to say it
you know what it was
i was meant for her
like it was meant for three
and they somehow forgot
forgot about me
but i won't forget
how i sat and watched
and he won't forget
when he came home
after coming
he saw i was there
he remebered about me
did he ever forget
he did for that hour
when i was sitting there
feeling like a fool
naked and embarassed
wanting to
but not wanting
hating her
but hating me more
it was her idea
then why did you go through
i thought it would be ok
but i didn't think three meant two
so back to the kitchen
i went in there looking
looking for something that i could do
i would exclude them
i would do it alone
just me and it
by myself
not three not two
but me
and did you
yes
one
two
three
gashes
one
two
three
slashes
for what it was supposed to be
him her me
but i sat there like a fool
and smoked a ciggarette
and now i sit bleeding
as he sits watching me
he stares awestruck
as i did to them
he wonders why
as i did to them
it would have been fine
if three was with me
but things got different
then what they were planned to be...
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 260
[topic] => 61
[informant] => Rxqueen
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 14
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
threesome twosome alone?
Contributed by
Rxqueen
on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 10:54:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I hate her
I really hate her
she slept with my husband
did she really
yes
i can't believe it
but it is true
i sat there watching
yes
i sat there
the whole time
watching
my husband on top of her
her on top of him
and them in every which way
me
watching
i went to smoke a ciggarette
you left the room
i did
i went and smoked and thought
thought about what was in my bed
my husband and her
her and my husband
upside down
twisted around
i didn't know what it meant
when three turned into two
i sat there and watched
wondering
now what am i supposed to do
so i left and smoked a ciggarette
you said that already
i went and smoked and thought about
what was in my bed
four condoms later
tired eyed and satisfied
she asked for a ride home
so we all said good bye
and i sat there and watched
as they walked out the door
i sat and i watched and wondered
how did three turn to two
I sat and thought
now what to do
what to do...
so I went in the kitchen
looked around
why
just thinking
thinking how three turned to two
so anyway
i went to the kitchen
and picked it up
what
i don't need to say it
you know what it was
i was meant for her
like it was meant for three
and they somehow forgot
forgot about me
but i won't forget
how i sat and watched
and he won't forget
when he came home
after coming
he saw i was there
he remebered about me
did he ever forget
he did for that hour
when i was sitting there
feeling like a fool
naked and embarassed
wanting to
but not wanting
hating her
but hating me more
it was her idea
then why did you go through
i thought it would be ok
but i didn't think three meant two
so back to the kitchen
i went in there looking
looking for something that i could do
i would exclude them
i would do it alone
just me and it
by myself
not three not two
but me
and did you
yes
one
two
three
gashes
one
two
three
slashes
for what it was supposed to be
him her me
but i sat there like a fool
and smoked a ciggarette
and now i sit bleeding
as he sits watching me
he stares awestruck
as i did to them
he wonders why
as i did to them
it would have been fine
if three was with me
but things got different
then what they were planned to be...
Copyright ©
Rxqueen
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by pixie on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 10:59:00 AM AEST
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wow, I really am gobsmacked, I wasnt expecting that at all. I think threesomes cause so many problems for couples as you dont really know how much hurt ,jealousy and anger can come from it before it is too late, I am truly sorry for your pain,I know that I would never take part in a threesome as things like that should be one to one I think....*hugs*
a very powerful and pained write, can really feel your raw emotions in this one,
pixie xx |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by nail-to-the-head on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 11:56:09 AM AEST
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wow! what can i say, very strong poem! understandable why you hate it, but thanks for sharing. very good write!
+ nail-to-the-head + |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by thumper on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 12:18:20 PM AEST
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I like how you presented this. The "other" person who keeps commenting. I'm sorry your expierence wasn't all that threesomes are cracked up to be. I don't think they should be done with someone you are emotionally attached to. There was a lot of emotion in this write. I hope it helped to get it off your chest. Peace to you.
Thumps ; 0) |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by MissTea on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 12:20:39 PM AEST
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really good poem! i can sense ur pain, confusion and anger coming thru at all times! it is a brilliant write but very sad too. i'm sorry u had to experience this and i hope that in the future it will always be TWO and that means YOU and ur HUSBAND!!
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by Dorian on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 02:05:04 PM AEST
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| sorry 4 your pain, well stated poem, hope things get better 4 u . . . Dorian |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by shelby on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 03:07:07 PM AEST
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sorry for your pain a bit of advice dont let another woman into your relationship marriage or otherwise specially if she is a friend of yours or is pretending to be argggg sorry dont get me started. I hope things return to normal for you once again
Michelle |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by loveisendless on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 02:38:37 AM AEST
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HONEY,THE LAST TIME I CHECKED BLOOD HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH LOVE! WHAT YOU THOUGHT YOUR HERAT REALLY NEVER BOUGHT!! WHY,WHO KNOWS THAT'S ONLY YOUR BUSINESS,BUT JUST LOOK LOVE IN THE EYES & DON'T EVER LET IT DIE!!! STRANGE,BUT NICELY WRITTEN!!!!
Lots Of Love~DAN!!!!! |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 03:21:55 AM AEST
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| I don't think I could have watched it happen, but I feel the pain and hope that you get the anger out. |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 07:24:21 AM AEST
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You agreed to it, which is the point he'll always make in his defence, I'm sure.
However, I was thoroughly absorbed by this rather harrowing account of what you went through. I think its one of the most powerful poems I've read in weeks and I'd never go for a threesome - its just too emotionally straining, in my opinion.
But anyway - I'd have to find myself a twosome first . . . lol.
Take care. |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by TedHuggableBare on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 11:45:24 PM AEST
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| Threesomes are not cracked up to what they claim to be. Yes, I have been in several. However, it's different when you are in one with the one you love. My recommendation is to never do it when you're in love. I learned a valuable lesson from it, hope others can too. Sorry for the pain for I know it hurts! |
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by Bridget_theMidget_Powerz on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 11:16:46 PM AEST
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| oh my, you really must be in touch with your feelings because you express them so clearly and vividly, I feel like I am you, there, felling how you felt, this is agreat talent you have here. |
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Re: threesome twosome alone?
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 12:10:16 AM AEST
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First off, sadly a great write (that is meant as a compliment but I can't think of any other way to say it, and it didn't sound very complimentish to me) Very good...but if you ever need anyone, get in touch with my cousin Dane lol...on here he is deadreckoning1983...he wouldn't kick you out of bed *winks*
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