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My Dark Surrender
Contributed by
Dreamer_of_Death
on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 03:22:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Death feels like flying and dreaming all at once
I know this to be fact.
You get up
Look around you
And notice that you're still laying down
Or sitting
Or crouching
Or kneeling
Or whatever you were doing before
You are confused
You are floating
You are trying desperately
Vainly
To get someone to notice you're dead
Help never came for me
Eventually I floated back down
Into my body
Into my shell
Into my empty life
I lay there
Eyes wide open
Breathing slowly
Then
I reached over
Grabbed my pillow
And tried to go back to being dead.
Please Goddess
I prayed
Let me give into my dark surrender once more
I promise I'll do it right this time....
I promise I'll do it right....
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2004-10-08 03:22:02]
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Re: My Dark Surrender
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by girish on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 03:31:26 AM AEST
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so you wish always to lie down? help will come when there is a will. don`t say laying down in your verse 5th line lying down will be apt
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Re: My Dark Surrender
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 03:47:19 AM AEST
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| omg i love it! |
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Re: My Dark Surrender
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by Yousef on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 06:21:30 AM AEST
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| Good poem, I really liked the name "Dark surrender", keep on writing and try different types of poetry. |
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Re: My Dark Surrender
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 12:12:28 AM AEST
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| anther well expressed poem from My Drak Lady, Emalthyia. But I hope these thoughts of self genocide leave you soon, your presense is one this world desprartly needs. |
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