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[aid] => mick
[title] => Final Moment
[time] => 2004-10-05 21:58:00
[hometext] => With Nothing to Say, I Leave You to Read.
[bodytext] => Final Moment
Dying slowly
Every single day
You wait impatiently
For your life to be taken away
Each second of pain
Makes you more certain
To end your life quickly
As the day fades
The drawling of your blood
Isn't enough
Till the final moment
When there's nothing left
Because of your feelings
You never saw the day
When the pain went away
And I'm left to wonder
What could have been
If you would have lived
And now I'm the one in pain
Because of what you did
I'm sorry for the pain
That you couldn't take
But couldn't you have
Just waited another day
To see the pain taken away?
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 245
[topic] => 36
[informant] => Essentially9
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[score] => 23
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
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Final Moment
Contributed by
Essentially9
on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 09:58:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Final Moment
Dying slowly
Every single day
You wait impatiently
For your life to be taken away
Each second of pain
Makes you more certain
To end your life quickly
As the day fades
The drawling of your blood
Isn't enough
Till the final moment
When there's nothing left
Because of your feelings
You never saw the day
When the pain went away
And I'm left to wonder
What could have been
If you would have lived
And now I'm the one in pain
Because of what you did
I'm sorry for the pain
That you couldn't take
But couldn't you have
Just waited another day
To see the pain taken away?
Copyright ©
Essentially9
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2004-10-05 21:58:00]
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Re: Final Moment
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by monophobic on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 10:08:01 PM AEST
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| wow this is such an emotional poem, i hope this is just a poem and noone you knew really did this, but i know this can truly be real life and im soo sorry about the loss if this is more than just a poem....good write never the less |
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Re: Final Moment
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 10:09:18 PM AEST
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This is a very emotional write great job...i love it
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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Re: Final Moment
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by Bruce on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 12:29:14 AM AEST
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| filled with emotion and pain. hope it has not been for real, but if so, so soory. |
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Re: Final Moment
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by screwup on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 06:24:06 AM AEST
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I really like this one because one of my friends keeps trying to commit suicide and it really makes a lot of sense... amazing write... and thank you for your many reads and comments on my poems.
~Deanna |
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Re: Final Moment
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 07:03:41 AM AEST
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Emotional and powerful, a poem that captures the mind, hooking the feelings, and filling a void with knowledge of what if.
Beautifully written, as all your writes are, thank you for allowing me to read such a vivid and awesome poem.
Take care always |
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Re: Final Moment
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by valentine on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 04:32:41 PM AEST
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This hooked it's claws on to my attention . . the emotion is simply captivating. Tragic but wonderfuly wrote.
~*~ Valentine~*~
....Rose |
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Re: Final Moment
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by KurdtBeantheWIKKED on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 07:31:39 PM AEST
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| : ) nice |
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Re: Final Moment
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 11:24:25 PM AEST
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Very deep and emotional write..... I can feel the pain in it...
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Final Moment
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by Archie on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 05:01:53 AM AEST
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Great write but sad.
I don't think people realize all they have until it disappears into the chasm of death. |
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Re: Final Moment
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by Spazzo on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 01:23:43 PM AEST
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Very emotional. It touched my heart.
Spazzo |
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Re: Final Moment
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 12:18:19 PM AEST
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very emotional...
filled with pain and anguish that pours into the reader. |
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Re: Final Moment
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by skyblumoon on
Thursday, 14th October 2004 @ 09:23:09 AM AEST
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Very sad. Made me cry. It brought back painful memories for me. Thank you for commenting on my poems.
Blu |
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Re: Final Moment
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by emystar on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 12:07:56 AM AEST
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The sad part here is that someone felt so bad about life that they give up.
I'm sure you're full with questions and no answers but don't blame yourself for not knowing. Some things in life jus happen and we may never understand.
Take it easy on yourself.
luv, huggs, strength,
emy |
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