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[aid] => mick
[title] => Since You Asked
[time] => 2004-10-03 00:55:12
[hometext] =>
[bodytext] => Tear me open
And drag me out
Break me down
And lay me out
I’m past being able
To pretend you can’t
Turn the key
And open the door
Release the valve
Let go some more
I’m not even going
Try to stop you
Swing the hammer
And break the glass
Rip the seal
Forget the past
I won’t get in
The way anymore
Move the curtain
And look inside
Peer through walls
To where I hide
I’ve forgotten how
To be coy
Lift the cover
Remove the veil
Pull me out
Let me wail
Yes, incredibly yes,
I’d tell you
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 260
[topic] => 37
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[score] => 25
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => ThankYouPoems
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Since You Asked
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 12:55:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
ThankYouPoems
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Tear me open
And drag me out
Break me down
And lay me out
I’m past being able
To pretend you can’t
Turn the key
And open the door
Release the valve
Let go some more
I’m not even going
Try to stop you
Swing the hammer
And break the glass
Rip the seal
Forget the past
I won’t get in
The way anymore
Move the curtain
And look inside
Peer through walls
To where I hide
I’ve forgotten how
To be coy
Lift the cover
Remove the veil
Pull me out
Let me wail
Yes, incredibly yes,
I’d tell you
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2004-10-03 00:55:12]
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Re: Since You Asked
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by a_bear on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 04:06:19 AM AEST
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| ummm ok. sounds kind of like truth telling time..someone told me to ask him any question the other day and swore he'd tell the truth. Know what I asked...his password. Be careful. lol |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 10:03:35 AM AEST
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I think the thing I love best about your writing is that, in addition to having a wonderful way with words (alliteration unintended, lol), you are brave. You are, whether you think so or not. To have the strength to write this, and the sheer guts to post it, awes me quite as much as the poetic virtue of this poem. Wonderful job, hon, and stay as strong as you're being :). I know you can.
--Nora |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 11:51:23 AM AEST
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Move the curtain
And look inside
Peer through walls
To where I hide--- this is how I feel always hiding yet it never seems like anyone is looking for me.... great poem ,very strong as always. A++++
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Re: Since You Asked
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by venkat on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 12:33:44 AM AEST
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| Ooh..very powerful write...and incredibly beautiful..:-)venkat |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by emystar on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 08:16:35 PM AEST
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Very unique write.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 14th October 2004 @ 09:06:30 PM AEST
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| This is powerful. Good job. Never hide your feelings. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 08:34:46 PM AEST
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| OMG. this was so good. so many pictures, memories, flashed thru my mind as i was reading this. Its a horrible feeling to just give up, let the person take advantage of u bc ur just so sick of fighting. I'm really sorry...:( |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 07:46:33 PM AEST
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Raw and powerful. I believe in letting a person know who you really are, without the façades, which we humans are always ready to toss up to keep people from getting truly close to us.
Excellent piece.
Andrew |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 04:30:51 PM AEST
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To be able to let someone in like this....sigh.....it changes your life.
May the connection stay strong forever. |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by Mangs on
Sunday, 26th December 2004 @ 11:28:59 AM AEST
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amazing poem....thers a very similar one ive written....called it AAAAAAHHH cos i felt like screaming....u might like it...
Umang. |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by marshmalloska on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 10:52:55 AM AEST
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| Thanyou for your kind post. I love some of your poems, i especially like the the last two lines of this, the whole things very .... something, i cant put my finger on it though. Its an ameleorative something, but i dont know what it is, thanks again , bye!! |
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Re: Since You Asked
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 09:02:17 PM AEST
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Wow! Talk about letting it out...you certainly did in this poem.
Timbo
(finding it incredibly powerful and beautifully penned)
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