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[sid] => 65422
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Lovesbane
[time] => 2004-09-28 09:43:42
[hometext] => Thanks to Nora for inspiring this one with her own poetic genius.
[bodytext] => I'm twisted
Can't fix it
The crack in the wall forged by your fist
I'm screaming
And pleading
The suicide note your insults composed
You say I'm
-- ineptly inane
(Only 'cause you leave me drained
and sagaciously insane)
I think you're
-- banefully severe
(Only 'cause you're insincere
and clouded eyes see unclear)
... But there's nothing like the icy comfort
Of your temper so consistently prevalent
the wind whispers in my ear and I cannot hear you yell at me
I'm losing
Abusing
You cannot drain that which already bleeds
I'm faded
Won't make it
You don't own me, you don't even know me
You think I'll
-- sacrifice my soul
(Only 'cause I feel so cold
and there's nowhere else to go)
I know you're
-- all the things I hate
(Please tell me it's not too late
and if I just sit and wait...)
But it's never gonna change and I know
My happy never after bound me long ago
the pain whispers to my fear and I cannot walk away from this
You will not
-- be my end of days
(Never mind the things I say
or how far I fell away)
I will be
-- beautiful inside
(All this pain was never mine
and now I know I'll be fine)
I am
-- taking back my life
I am
-- creating something wonderful
I am...
Making mistakes as the world fades to gray
Wasting time but I'm learning how to pray
learning to breathe so that I will have a beautiful goodbye
[comments] => 11
[counter] => 680
[topic] => 19
[informant] => MoonlitAngel
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 18
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => InspirationalPoems
)
Lovesbane
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 09:43:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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I'm twisted
Can't fix it
The crack in the wall forged by your fist
I'm screaming
And pleading
The suicide note your insults composed
You say I'm
-- ineptly inane
(Only 'cause you leave me drained
and sagaciously insane)
I think you're
-- banefully severe
(Only 'cause you're insincere
and clouded eyes see unclear)
... But there's nothing like the icy comfort
Of your temper so consistently prevalent
the wind whispers in my ear and I cannot hear you yell at me
I'm losing
Abusing
You cannot drain that which already bleeds
I'm faded
Won't make it
You don't own me, you don't even know me
You think I'll
-- sacrifice my soul
(Only 'cause I feel so cold
and there's nowhere else to go)
I know you're
-- all the things I hate
(Please tell me it's not too late
and if I just sit and wait...)
But it's never gonna change and I know
My happy never after bound me long ago
the pain whispers to my fear and I cannot walk away from this
You will not
-- be my end of days
(Never mind the things I say
or how far I fell away)
I will be
-- beautiful inside
(All this pain was never mine
and now I know I'll be fine)
I am
-- taking back my life
I am
-- creating something wonderful
I am...
Making mistakes as the world fades to gray
Wasting time but I'm learning how to pray
learning to breathe so that I will have a beautiful goodbye
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
... [
2004-09-28 09:43:42]
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 11:07:14 AM AEST
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| the first step is always the hardest, but the results from that first are always worth the second and so on, awesoem poem i enjoyed reainding it, thanx for sharing. |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 11:12:21 AM AEST
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a very intresting and powerful write, filled with emotions and sadness, an altogether wonderful write,
bravo,
pixie xx |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Black13 on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 11:47:44 AM AEST
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Awesome Dee.
Went well with Linkin Park in the background.
This one was really good. |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Dorian on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 02:54:16 PM AEST
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sorry 4 the pain your in u write very well Take care
(((((((4 u)))))))) Dorian : ) |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by recklessguy on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 03:08:44 PM AEST
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so emotional a beauty
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Remy on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 10:52:37 AM AEST
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wow... chaotic, yet there's a complex structure to it. great writing, love the style... ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 1st October 2004 @ 09:48:40 PM AEST
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*finally comments* =P
Well, you know (or could guess, if I didn't tell you, coz I don't remember if I did) how much I love the ending parts of this poem, both the message and your gorgeous wording of it. This whole poem's awesome coz it's completely you yet sort of different from anything you've ever written before, at the same time . . . I love it. Great job with this one and the fourth from last stanza makes me want to hug you. *does so whether you like it or not*
love always,
Nora |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Ronald on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 12:49:28 AM AEST
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| This is what I call a unique and powerful poetry. The words are powerful though it may just be simple words. Like the structure of your poem too. Overall it's a fantastic poem. |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 03:29:38 PM AEST
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Very powerful Dee. Not only do I like the construction cause it works, but it's uniquely you.
Thanks for posting this. |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Black13 on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 07:36:14 PM AEST
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I had to go through and read a few more of yours again.
This one... It screams in such a way that I don't think I could grasp the pain withing.
It was beautiful as are most of your but in... A completely more painful and hopeless way. |
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Re: Lovesbane
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 24th March 2007 @ 01:00:00 PM AEST
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Frustration beautifully penned... You didn't let it take control of the piece, you held on to it, and beauty found its place with pain.
Take care,
David |
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