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I Surrender
Contributed by
lanna047
on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 10:11:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I tried
I really did
to get along
and just be friends
but your attitude
it didn't help
you didn't try
I doubt you even care
you weren't perfect
neither was I
did it really matter?
I didn't mind
I'm conflicted
the sting I feel
the pain inside
I can't stand you near
but at the same time
I can't let go
I don't understand why
this longing persists
I am bitter
angry and hurt
stuck in time
wanting memories to die
why do I wait
for you to come around
my hopes build up
only to be let down
I'm too tired
this fight is over
it's not worth it
I surrender
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lanna047
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2004-09-15 22:11:50] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: I Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 10:15:32 PM AEST (User
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fantastic write.
"why do I wait
for you to come around
my hopes build up
only to be let down
I'm too tired
this fight is over
it's not worth it
I surrender" that was my favorite part of this. excellent work.
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Re: I Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 10:30:05 PM AEST (User
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This is a great emotional write. I use my poetry also as a catharsis. It lets me vent the anger and frustration that otherwise would drive me insane. Keep writing. You are good.
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Re: I Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by Pyrofungus on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 10:37:37 PM AEST (User
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great write...kinda reminds me of my bf...
please comment on my work too
summer |
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Re: I Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by shadowmaster_045 on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 11:32:28 PM AEST (User
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that was one of the single most beautiful poems i've ever heard right behind the works of Poe in my book i really liked it |
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Re: I Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by MomentInTime on
Thursday, 16th September 2004 @ 01:53:42 AM AEST (User
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I enjoyed your style of flow. And it nearly looks like a knife
Jordan oxo |
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