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Shining peaks disturb my rest
Set out on a secret mission
To disturb my sleeping zest

Gaping breaches, harsh and fierce
Open big mouths in my walls
Those light beams just poke and pierce
Till all I’ve built sighs and falls

Without mercy they attack
Crack and clefts grow in my shanks
Hidden peace has to draw back
No! I cry, Just close the ranks!

This black vortex starts to dance
Shows its depths in a scaring gape
My invincible defense
No jack-o’-lantern can escape

Never will I give in to this
There’s no room for joyful bliss
Burning pieces I’ll tear apart
In this pit that was my heart
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From the Pit

Contributed by Hurretje on Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 03:20:58 AM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

Sneaky stars enter my vision
Shining peaks disturb my rest
Set out on a secret mission
To disturb my sleeping zest

Gaping breaches, harsh and fierce
Open big mouths in my walls
Those light beams just poke and pierce
Till all I’ve built sighs and falls

Without mercy they attack
Crack and clefts grow in my shanks
Hidden peace has to draw back
No! I cry, Just close the ranks!

This black vortex starts to dance
Shows its depths in a scaring gape
My invincible defense
No jack-o’-lantern can escape

Never will I give in to this
There’s no room for joyful bliss
Burning pieces I’ll tear apart
In this pit that was my heart

Copyright Â© Hurretje ... [ 2004-09-12 03:20:58]
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Re: From the Pit (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 03:40:45 AM AEST
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great images from mind's space.. as if drwn from the core of subconscious emotions...it is a marvellous poem. venkat

Re: From the Pit (User Rating: 1 )
by MomentInTime on Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 07:45:56 AM AEST
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I will echo Venkat's comments

Great write

Jordan oxo

Re: From the Pit (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 09:01:51 AM AEST
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A very deep thought excellently penned.

wildejohnny.

Re: From the Pit (User Rating: 1 )
by thumper on Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 09:31:23 AM AEST
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Let the light shine in!! Make room for joyful bliss!! ;o) I truely enjoyed this write, sounds like your fortress is breaking down. Great flow and meaning. Peace to you, (((HUR)))
Thumps ; 0)

Re: From the Pit (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 11:29:24 AM AEST
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Hurretje, a little happiness will not kill you. Come on into the light with the other optimistic fools ike me. It is actually very nice here with lots of laughter, love, faith and hope.
(you know you want too) lol

Hugs,
Rita (aka) Sissy Sunshine

Re: From the Pit (User Rating: 1 )
by Silent_Composer on Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 06:17:51 AM AEST
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Your poetry astounds me you seem to know how to catch the readers imagination and hold it, This poem saga you have going is awesome as its plot unfolds.

~Silence~

Re: From the Pit (User Rating: 1 )
by Fionndruinne on Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 08:35:59 PM AEST
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Sometimes the Light seems that way: burning, searing brightness, shredding the last of our fugitive peace. But the only thing there is to do, really, is, throw yourself straight into the blaze. Lose yourself, and in the revealing Light, you will find yourself.

Excellent piece.
Andrew

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