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Array ( [sid] => 63308 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Hell [time] => 2004-09-10 22:22:40 [hometext] => This is one of my favorites that I have written, You may like it so please read! [bodytext] => Hell

Once upon a time,
the clock was ticking,
louder and louder,
until twelve times it chimed,

And who was that sitting,
alone on the bed,
waiting for a call,
from someone already dead,

And the screams,
left in your wake,
echoed the city,
and shook the lake,

Whose heart bleed harder,
I can not judge,
while yours dripped blood,
mine poured love,

The thought of a knife,
held tight in your hand,
betraying yourself,
on red stained sand,

And who's in hell now?
I know its not you,
because I'm here alone,
wishing you were here too. [comments] => 7 [counter] => 165 [topic] => 13 [informant] => Firestarter1038 [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 24 [ratings] => 5 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )

Hell

Contributed by Firestarter1038 on Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 10:22:40 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

Hell

Once upon a time,
the clock was ticking,
louder and louder,
until twelve times it chimed,

And who was that sitting,
alone on the bed,
waiting for a call,
from someone already dead,

And the screams,
left in your wake,
echoed the city,
and shook the lake,

Whose heart bleed harder,
I can not judge,
while yours dripped blood,
mine poured love,

The thought of a knife,
held tight in your hand,
betraying yourself,
on red stained sand,

And who's in hell now?
I know its not you,
because I'm here alone,
wishing you were here too.

Copyright © Firestarter1038 ... [ 2004-09-10 22:22:40]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Hell (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 10:29:18 PM AEST
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Very sad but written well.
huggs, smiles,
emy

Re: Hell (User Rating: 1 )
by Silent_Composer on Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 10:39:12 PM AEST
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Sad and emotional, nicely written and composed, very well done.

~silence~

Re: Hell (User Rating: 1 )
by JT on Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 10:47:46 PM AEST
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great write, well built. Liked the last verse alot.
-jt-

Re: Hell (User Rating: 1 )
by arden on Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 11:14:38 PM AEST
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hmm interesting.
dark, sad, emotional. good poem.
well written even though it seemed a bit simple. but it was still awesome.
great work. keep it up.
Arden

Re: Hell (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 11:26:53 PM AEST
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amazing write.

Re: Hell (User Rating: 1 )
by katyqueen35 on Saturday, 11th September 2004 @ 12:05:48 AM AEST
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Wow i say this is deep.
such details.good job.

Re: Hell (User Rating: 1 )
by tifrob on Saturday, 11th September 2004 @ 07:10:25 PM AEST
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Truly sad. The reader hurts for you.

J~

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