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My heart was sold the first time I met it
On that sandy beach in southern France
I watched it from behind the grassy hill
As It stripped down the to the bare
So perfect
It lay down, toes beneath the sand
Arms splayed, body for all to see
My god it was built to perfection
I mustered all the courage I had
And walked down to meet it
There it was lying in fall splendour
I layed down beside it
Clasped my hand over its chest
It screamed
Holding its head between my hands
I twisted with all the strength I had
Until the struggling body ceased
I removed my clothes and lay above
The now lifeless pristine corpse
And fell in love this time for real [comments] => 3 [counter] => 471 [topic] => 13 [informant] => alecfernadez [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 8 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )

It

Contributed by alecfernadez on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 09:59:45 AM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

It was a pretty body in a pretty blue dress
My heart was sold the first time I met it
On that sandy beach in southern France
I watched it from behind the grassy hill
As It stripped down the to the bare
So perfect
It lay down, toes beneath the sand
Arms splayed, body for all to see
My god it was built to perfection
I mustered all the courage I had
And walked down to meet it
There it was lying in fall splendour
I layed down beside it
Clasped my hand over its chest
It screamed
Holding its head between my hands
I twisted with all the strength I had
Until the struggling body ceased
I removed my clothes and lay above
The now lifeless pristine corpse
And fell in love this time for real

Copyright © alecfernadez ... [ 2004-09-06 09:59:45]
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Re: It (User Rating: 1 )
by inoc on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 10:06:11 AM AEST
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you wrote it well

but the ending...I was hoping for a different one
but nice write anyway...
cheers!

Re: It (User Rating: 1 )
by Kie on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 10:23:40 AM AEST
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I think if I have EVER read a poem written by a sociopath or someone with sociopathic tendancies it would be similiar to the one you wrote. You just wrote it well, brilliant in fact.

You captured with words the feeling of no conscience, the coldness, the unfeeling and no thought to consequence for a behavior.

I couldn't have chosen a more fitting title.

I am beyond impressed with this one Alex. I am stunned.

You have a dark beauty that your pen brings to life in every reader's mind.

Bravo and well done.

Kie

Re: It (User Rating: 1 )
by kyletycz on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 01:41:36 PM AEST
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awsome poem, its sad to know that there are people who cant understand that their actions are evil in nature, but they cannot tell the differnece, there is much sadness in my opinion there, and i love how you conveyed it in yoru writing,

keep up the good work

l8r

Ninja Tycz

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