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Array ( [sid] => 62697 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Intoxicated [time] => 2004-09-05 21:40:52 [hometext] => when alcohol has taken away the trust, the respect, and the only good guy that i fell in love with [bodytext] => Your red eyes fall upon mine
bearing your soul
Your hushed slurred words
lose all their control
Another sombre state
you're revealing to me
You're buckling beneath it's weight
I can tell it's frustrating
You touch my face and promise
a world of promises again
How can I take your word on this
when you've already promised me the same?
Can you look at me
with those shining green eyes?
Can you assure me
your words are not lies?
Can you convince me
you won't let me fall?
Can I convince you
to reveal it all?

[comments] => 8 [counter] => 244 [topic] => 66 [informant] => AnastasiaN [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => drugabuse )

Intoxicated

Contributed by AnastasiaN on Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 09:40:52 PM in AEST
Topic: drugabuse

Your red eyes fall upon mine
bearing your soul
Your hushed slurred words
lose all their control
Another sombre state
you're revealing to me
You're buckling beneath it's weight
I can tell it's frustrating
You touch my face and promise
a world of promises again
How can I take your word on this
when you've already promised me the same?
Can you look at me
with those shining green eyes?
Can you assure me
your words are not lies?
Can you convince me
you won't let me fall?
Can I convince you
to reveal it all?

Copyright © AnastasiaN ... [ 2004-09-05 21:40:52]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 09:48:28 PM AEST
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Very sad but written well.
I know how that feels as I was once married to an alcholic.
Hang tuff.
luv, huggs,
emy

Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 10:41:19 PM AEST
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powerful write. i agree with emy on this one.

Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by tears_of_blood on Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 11:06:20 PM AEST
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hey iam going to show you that all the words i say are true and no more lie no more hurt and pain iam stoping it all

brad

Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by wild_girl121 on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 02:14:15 AM AEST
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wow thats a good write. alcohol has taken away the trust, the respect that people give you , but it depends on how you handle yourself. do it wisely and people dont judge you so harsh. angie

Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by Bohemian_with_a_pen on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 03:12:35 AM AEST
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awesome

Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by Alina on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 01:00:54 PM AEST
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I can completely relate to you on this subject. The person I fell in love with has an addiction with cocaine.....as so did I. I still love him and we still talk..... but I had to let him go..... if it is real.... then you're loved one will comeback to you through out time. You can't change anyone...... you can just be there when they need you. Much love and luck to you.
ALINA

Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by deadreckoning1983 on Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 02:07:27 AM AEST
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i will disagree with emy. this is not sad, it is very powerful. by the end of the poem you seem to be in control of yourself and your feelings. this was very strong and very good poetry. DR

Re: Intoxicated (User Rating: 1 )
by justjonesy on Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 08:30:19 PM AEST
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Yes, Very powerful....im sure we've all felt the loneliness of alcohol on eithe side of this story

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