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Array ( [sid] => 62421 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => As Death becomes me [time] => 2004-09-03 13:47:27 [hometext] => [bodytext] => I am watching my body
lying motionless on the ground
i am waiting for the moment
when i hear my hearts last pound

i cannot leave
until my life is completely done
i am waiting as death becomes me
finally i have won

what i could i have done
as i stare i wonder
how could i have changed my fate
i am floating higher and my body soon under

i am fading fast
staring at the knife in my bodys chest
my heart will soon stop beating
and i will finally be able to rest [comments] => 3 [counter] => 218 [topic] => 36 [informant] => brokensoul [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Suicide )

As Death becomes me

Contributed by brokensoul on Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 01:47:27 PM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

I am watching my body
lying motionless on the ground
i am waiting for the moment
when i hear my hearts last pound

i cannot leave
until my life is completely done
i am waiting as death becomes me
finally i have won

what i could i have done
as i stare i wonder
how could i have changed my fate
i am floating higher and my body soon under

i am fading fast
staring at the knife in my bodys chest
my heart will soon stop beating
and i will finally be able to rest

Copyright © brokensoul ... [ 2004-09-03 13:47:27]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: As Death becomes me (User Rating: 1 )
by kishdaswani on Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 01:52:59 PM AEST
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nicely written....dark very dark but i like the way you wrote it....have you tried writing a light hearted poem? im you you can write beautiful poems, you have the passion and you can clearly express your words.

Re: As Death becomes me (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 03:04:18 PM AEST
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so dark and sad well written though
Michelle

Re: As Death becomes me (User Rating: 1 )
by poetic_ire on Friday, 17th September 2004 @ 09:13:37 PM AEST
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Hi. It's me. Duh. Anyway, I wanted to comment on your poetry. It's amazing to read it because I never thought of you like this.

You're very articulate in your poetry.

Good Job!

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