Your Poetry Dot Com

Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com - Read, Rate, Comment on, or Submit Poetry. Browse Poetry Forums, or just enjoy other parts of our poetic community.
One of the largest databases of poetry on the net, now over 198,500+ poems!

Poems On Site: 198,500+ Comments On Poems: 427,000+ Forum Posts: 105,000+

Custom Search


Welcome !	Home · FAQ · Topics · Web Links · Your Account · Submit Poetry · Top 30 · OldSite Link	29-May 17:12:47 AEST

Menu

· Our eBay Store

· Error Submit

Poetry

· Submit Poetry

· Least Read Poems

· Members Listing

· Old Site Post 2001

· Old Site Pre 2001

· Poetry Archive

· Public Domain Poetry

Stories

· Stories (NEW ! )

· Submit Story

· Story Topics

· Stories Archive

· Story Search

Community

· Our Poetry Forums

· Our Arcade
100's of Games !

Site Help

· FAQ

· Feedback

Members Areas

· Your Account

· Members Journals

· Premium Sign-Up

Premium Section

· Special Section

· Premium Poems

· Premium Submit

· Premium Search

· Premium Archive

· Premium Topics

Fun & Games

· Jokes

· Bubble Puzzle

· Cross Word Easy

· Word Hunt

Reference

· Dictionary (Rhyming)

· Site Updates

· Special Content

Search

Top

Help This Site

· Donations

Others

· Moderators

Our Other Sites

· Embroidery Design Store
· Your Jokes
· Special Urls
· JM Embroideries
· Public Domain Poetry and Stories
· Diamond Dotz
· Cooking Info and Recipes
· Quoof - Australian Story

Social

Array ( [sid] => 61806 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Under the Willow [time] => 2004-08-29 12:47:25 [hometext] => my cousin and i wrote this poem [bodytext] => On a blanket in the tall grass
We lie under a willow tree
Watching an approaching storm
Draw nearer and nearer feeling free.

The smell of rain in the air is so heavy
We sit closer and closer
As the storm draws near
A feeling of mystery surrounds us like a bulldozer.

Then suddenly a loud crash of thunder
That shakes the skies
And a flash of lightning
That light up our eyes.

Now we run to the cabin
As the rain comes pouring down
We make a fire and lay by the hearth
Now our love we found. [comments] => 2 [counter] => 190 [topic] => 2 [informant] => Stew [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LovePoetry )

Under the Willow

Contributed by Stew on Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 12:47:25 PM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry

On a blanket in the tall grass
We lie under a willow tree
Watching an approaching storm
Draw nearer and nearer feeling free.

The smell of rain in the air is so heavy
We sit closer and closer
As the storm draws near
A feeling of mystery surrounds us like a bulldozer.

Then suddenly a loud crash of thunder
That shakes the skies
And a flash of lightning
That light up our eyes.

Now we run to the cabin
As the rain comes pouring down
We make a fire and lay by the hearth
Now our love we found.

Copyright © Stew ... [ 2004-08-29 12:47:25]
(Date/Time posted on site)

Advertisments:

Previous Posted Poem | | Next Posted Poem

Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more

All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title etc.

Re: Under the Willow (User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 12:49:21 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

awww stew this was a beautiful write between you and your cousin,

pixie xx

Re: Under the Willow (User Rating: 1 )
by Silent-No-More on Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 12:55:54 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

Oh! You're so lucky to have someone to write with! I'm completely jealous!

Your collaboration came out nicely. The line "A feeling of mystery surrounds us like a bulldozer" kind of stuck out at me.... maybe I'm tooooo logical sometimes, but it didn't seem to make sense (how could one bulldozer surround someone?). I do know what you were getting at... just thought perhaps there's a better metaphor out there...

I do hope you don't mind the comment... it is a nice piece and I don't mean to take away from that. And oh! I do love the feeling that comes when a thunderstorm is approaching!

Good write!
SNM

While every care is taken to ensure the general sites content is family safe, our moderators cannot be in all places; all the time. Please report poetry and or comments that are in breach of our site rules HERE (Please include poem title or url). Parents also please ensure that you supervise your children well when they are on the internet; regardless of what a site says about being, or being considered, child-safe.

Poetry is much like a great photo, a single "moment in time" capturing many feelings and emotions. Yet, they are very alive; creating stirrings within the readers who form visual "pictures" of the expressed emotions within the Poem. ©

Opinions expressed in the poetry, comments, forums etc. on this site are not necessarily those of this site, its owners and/or operators; but of the individuals who post items to this site.
Frequently Asked Questions | | | Privacy Policy | | | Contact Webmaster

All submitted items are Copyright © to their submitter. All the rest Copyright © 2002-2050 by Your Poetry Dot Com

All logos and trademarks in this site are property of their respective owners.

Script Generation Time: 0.052 Seconds. - View our Site Map | .© your-poetry.com