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Array ( [sid] => 61378 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => To Bad It Was Just A Dream [time] => 2004-08-25 14:40:55 [hometext] => ok ok the positive writing wasn't so bad but writing this way like i normally do comes more naturally to me [bodytext] => ***
A locked door

A lifeless body on the floor

An empty pill bottle

Something so simple

She hated herself in every way

Went through the same routine every single day

Always beatened

And bruised

Yelling

Screaming

Always fighting

Dreams dashed

Feelings thrashed

This girl was in a neverending battle

And now it's time for her funeral

She didn't wanna wait for things to get better

She didn't wanna be a part of the future

She won't deny that some of her memories were worthwhile

But her friends just couldn't seem to see passed her fake smile

She used to be so vivid

If only it all could have been prevented

A broken child

With broken wings

Living in a broken home

...This girl sounds like me

.................To bad it was just a dream

[comments] => 5 [counter] => 176 [topic] => 36 [informant] => WestCPunk [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 9 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Suicide )
To Bad It Was Just A Dream

Contributed by WestCPunk on Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 02:40:55 PM in AEST
Topic: Suicide



***
A locked door

A lifeless body on the floor

An empty pill bottle

Something so simple

She hated herself in every way

Went through the same routine every single day

Always beatened

And bruised

Yelling

Screaming

Always fighting

Dreams dashed

Feelings thrashed

This girl was in a neverending battle

And now it's time for her funeral

She didn't wanna wait for things to get better

She didn't wanna be a part of the future

She won't deny that some of her memories were worthwhile

But her friends just couldn't seem to see passed her fake smile

She used to be so vivid

If only it all could have been prevented

A broken child

With broken wings

Living in a broken home

...This girl sounds like me

.................To bad it was just a dream





Copyright © WestCPunk ... [ 2004-08-25 14:40:55]
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Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream (User Rating: 1 )
by yellow_sundragon on Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 03:59:22 PM AEST
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This style comes very natural for you, I can tell because it doesn't feel forced...

A very good poem.. I like it... and I've had them dreams that make you wake up and curse the gods for waking up... oblivion would be so much easier....

Jaime


Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 06:42:03 PM AEST
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Sure, don't challenge yourself. Stay where it is safe and comfortable. Let's see how far that takes you in life. I expected more than that from you, for some reason.

It is an o.k. poem.

Hugs,
Rita


Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream (User Rating: 1 )
by WestCPunk on Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 07:28:24 PM AEST
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ha ha ya ya ya
just because i write this way doesn't mean what you think it does rita it's what i'm good at and no one should judge me for that.....i'm certainly not afraid of a challenge i'm just better at writing this way and it lets me express the way i feel then actually going ahead and doing all of it and think expresing it is a lot better than actually doing it....


Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 08:15:46 PM AEST
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i loved your write. =]


Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream (User Rating: 1 )
by CrimsonTears on Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 11:23:46 PM AEST
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I liked this alot...great write

Lots of Love
CrimsonTears




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