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Beneath the Surface
Contributed by
kailadragon
on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 08:19:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Beneath the surface
a warriors time bides
waiting to pounce
her true nature hides
Beneath the surface
an eternal flame burns
giving light to the dark
to spread it yearns
Beneath the surface
a war rages on
fighting forever
the days so long
beneath the surface
inside my skin
i'm going insane
raging for him
Copyright ©
kailadragon
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2004-08-24 20:19:15]
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Re: Beneath the Surface
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 09:06:50 PM AEST
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| good write. i had a poem titled this (i think). you used some nice analogies. short and to the point. |
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Re: Beneath the Surface
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 09:56:08 AM AEST
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great write, great flow,
pixie xx |
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Re: Beneath the Surface
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by Solmyr1404 on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 01:33:55 AM AEST
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hey, i enjoyed this one....very good write....you may not have been able to type as fast as me at school, but you were always the better writer, and we were like the two best....this is so much better than any of mine, possibly any i'll ever write, but try to top 206 gwam without a mistake
Solmyr Malikando Amerikayou
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