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Array ( [sid] => 61172 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Dave's Poem [time] => 2004-08-23 19:37:52 [hometext] => This i am posting for a very good friend, he asked if i could post it for him so here it is, I think it is very good, I would like to know what the community think :D Kakashi [bodytext] => In the beginning it started so well
The attraction between us, strong
Everything looked to be perfect
But oh, how I was so wrong

The chemistry was just lacking
You made affection seem a chore
But still I held on, and hoped for the best
But now I can see I needed more

Those words don’t mean anything now
Anyone can say what’s been said before
I used to take it as the truth
But the truth is so close and so sore

Maybe some would want what I had
As they have that which I desire
Maybe it was just all from exposure
But the jealousy burned deep like fire

And it hurt me more than you will ever know
But it’s too late now to put it all right
Because with more I tried to offer you
The more I lost the wounding fight

Then when it was finally all over
A chance for me to heal arose
But you denied me from any respect
And delivered your final blows

It’s funny how life can rip you apart
Or make you smile, or break your heart…
It makes you hurt like never before
And kicks you whilst you’re on the floor
But there’s one thing that is for sure
Life will go on forevermore
And bring more minds to mercy’s door
At the expense of those who should be so poor.
I dedicate this to he who’s been through it before
And in his life, taken an unfair amount more

Dave Mesquitta / Ltqball [comments] => 1 [counter] => 193 [topic] => 43 [informant] => lonely_kakashi [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 14 [ratings] => 3 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => oops )

Dave's Poem

Contributed by lonely_kakashi on Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 07:37:52 PM in AEST
Topic: oops

In the beginning it started so well
The attraction between us, strong
Everything looked to be perfect
But oh, how I was so wrong

The chemistry was just lacking
You made affection seem a chore
But still I held on, and hoped for the best
But now I can see I needed more

Those words don’t mean anything now
Anyone can say what’s been said before
I used to take it as the truth
But the truth is so close and so sore

Maybe some would want what I had
As they have that which I desire
Maybe it was just all from exposure
But the jealousy burned deep like fire

And it hurt me more than you will ever know
But it’s too late now to put it all right
Because with more I tried to offer you
The more I lost the wounding fight

Then when it was finally all over
A chance for me to heal arose
But you denied me from any respect
And delivered your final blows

It’s funny how life can rip you apart
Or make you smile, or break your heart…
It makes you hurt like never before
And kicks you whilst you’re on the floor
But there’s one thing that is for sure
Life will go on forevermore
And bring more minds to mercy’s door
At the expense of those who should be so poor.
I dedicate this to he who’s been through it before
And in his life, taken an unfair amount more

Dave Mesquitta / Ltqball

Copyright Â© lonely_kakashi ... [ 2004-08-23 19:37:52]
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Re: Dave's Poem (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 07:56:03 PM AEST
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I think Dave should register here at YPDC and post more and more poems. He writes, evidently, straight from the heart. I like this poem and I like his style. Practice makes perfect. I think he should practice on us.

Rita

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