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[aid] => mick
[title] => Denial
[time] => 2004-08-22 21:11:01
[hometext] => *** Again... different. I'm kind of all over the place--- it's just flooding out --- and I'm just letting it come, however it seems to want to ***
[bodytext] =>
When the tap, tap, tap
Becomes a rap, rap rap
And the moon comes rolling ‘round
I twist and turn
I break - I burn
And bring the sledgehammer down
In darkest night
I cry – I fight
And fall unto my knees
In timelessness
I hope – I wish
For eyes that couldn’t see
When the slow, slow, slow
Begins to go, go, go
And the sun picks up the pace
I ache and yearn
I panic – I turn
And shatter the mirror’s face
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 205
[topic] => 61
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 15
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
Denial
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 09:11:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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When the tap, tap, tap
Becomes a rap, rap rap
And the moon comes rolling ‘round
I twist and turn
I break - I burn
And bring the sledgehammer down
In darkest night
I cry – I fight
And fall unto my knees
In timelessness
I hope – I wish
For eyes that couldn’t see
When the slow, slow, slow
Begins to go, go, go
And the sun picks up the pace
I ache and yearn
I panic – I turn
And shatter the mirror’s face
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Silent-No-More
... [
2004-08-22 21:11:01]
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Re: Denial
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by ps_ihateyou on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 09:23:37 PM AEST
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| i really liked this. keep up the good work. |
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Re: Denial
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by Orlando on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 10:26:09 PM AEST
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| Fantastic! Made me want to break out all the Edgar Allen Poe I've let collect dust... if that makes ANY sense. |
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Re: Denial
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 12:29:40 AM AEST
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Sounds to me like you are coming out of denial and it is hitting hard. This is an excellent write of pain and pent-up turmoil.
Rita |
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Re: Denial
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by pixie on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 05:59:14 AM AEST
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a very sad and emotional write, beautifully written,
pixie xx |
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Re: Denial
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 06:38:23 AM AEST
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I think Rita has a point. Its lke you are TRYING to deny something thats difficult for you...accept it.
I love your change in style, it nice to see you are good and versitle! |
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Re: Denial
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by pvd on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 06:56:38 AM AEST
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Let the feeling go with the flow. I picture sleepless nights tossing and turning.
Keep going.
PVD |
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Re: Denial
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by artostuff on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 02:54:39 PM AEST
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| I like this, a very good write, if you shut your eyes and see it, you can almost live it. Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: Denial
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 03:47:48 PM AEST
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Great portrayal of anger and emotion. The ending was quite intense, and I liked the fast-paced flow of the poem. Good work.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Denial
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 11:59:49 AM AEST
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Wow! Different, but interesting. Shocking ending.
Wow!
Not much else I can say.
Kinda leaves me at a loss for words.
Stitch |
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Re: Denial
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by Pyrofungus on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 09:24:12 PM AEST
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awesome bro AWESOME!
please comment on my work too
summer |
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Re: Denial
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by girltranscended on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 11:04:33 PM AEST
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| this style is especially interesting - I like the fast pace of the last couple of yours I just read. It's neat to picture you up all night long and know where you might be standing when you see the hawks and clouds - I am awestruck by what you do with it. I am so happy the words are pouring out of you - it's a very very good sign. You are truly an inspiration and I love you so much for your strength and your weakness. |
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Re: Denial
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 10:47:40 PM AEST
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I read this last night and I was quite literally speechless...hence, there wasn't a comment. This is because the emotion in it hit me so hard. Some of it is my frame of mine. Some of it is because I feel I am relating to it.
So here I am again....reading it.
Whatever the case, it shows that it is a powerfully emotional poem and that to me, is what makes poetry great (including this poetry) and what some poetry is all about. Feelings and the way we express them....and yes, I may be repeating myself but it's worth repeating:
You are brilliantly awesome in the way you express yourself and lay those words out upon the page.
Thank you,
Timber
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