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[aid] => mick
[title] => Found
[time] => 2004-08-20 02:36:40
[hometext] => *** Something different... (so different, I couldn't even be objective about it)... Nora - thanks for your feedback... this would not be here if not for you. ***
[bodytext] =>
The thunder found me
There underneath the bed
And when lightening lit the room
I was no longer dead
The walls fell in
And trapped me there
Time disappeared
(As if you care)
I reached out
And felt you there
I begged for help
(You wouldn’t dare)
I was lost
But you were there
Inside the black
(Beyond nowhere)
I awoke
To no one there
Reality returned
(Without air)
The morning found me
There underneath the bed
And when sunlight lit the room
I was no longer dead
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 249
[topic] => 48
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 25
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
)
Found
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 02:36:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The thunder found me
There underneath the bed
And when lightening lit the room
I was no longer dead
The walls fell in
And trapped me there
Time disappeared
(As if you care)
I reached out
And felt you there
I begged for help
(You wouldn’t dare)
I was lost
But you were there
Inside the black
(Beyond nowhere)
I awoke
To no one there
Reality returned
(Without air)
The morning found me
There underneath the bed
And when sunlight lit the room
I was no longer dead
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
... [
2004-08-20 02:36:40]
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Re: Found
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by pvd on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 06:48:43 AM AEST
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Beginning and ending with the same stanza is a nice touch. You sometimes write from a dark lonely place.
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Re: Found
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by UnfallenTears on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 07:44:13 AM AEST
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| I like this. It could have different meanings for different people but is still really personal. Amazing job. |
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Re: Found
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by Kie on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 08:37:52 AM AEST
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I not only liked this writing style but thought the lay out was very powerful.
It had a nightmare, hurt, lost, undertone to it.
Remarkable and quite impressive.
Kie |
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Re: Found
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 09:27:21 AM AEST
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I agree with Kie, the first thing i thought was, Nightmare...
It does have that sort of feel to it.
I like this...it is different like you said, not like anything i have read of yours before.
Don't worry hun...the darkness will always fade. |
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Re: Found
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by WinterFawn on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 03:40:02 PM AEST
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I've read this over several times before coming to comment. I really like the way this turned out. I agree that it does have the feel of a dream or nightmare....sad and chilling but with the lines "I was no longer dead" pulling the reader up out of that darkness with some hope. Beautifully constructed piece.
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Re: Found
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 08:09:30 PM AEST
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Well done! This is one of those poems I need to read twice to comprehend fully. I do like them. Very emotive, and I like the somewhat parallel theme in parentheses.
Nicely done.
Andrew |
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Re: Found
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 06:24:00 AM AEST
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wow, I get the feeling from some of your other writes that some of the analogies in here are people in your life.
You have a way of hiding things in your writes and this is no exception!
Clever and well done. |
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Re: Found
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 01:28:12 AM AEST
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Awesome write.
Very deep, yet light hearted.
Great work, creative.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Found
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by destinyfate on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 08:44:13 PM AEST
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This is really beautiful.Keep up the great writing.
Tonya
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Re: Found
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 12:55:28 AM AEST
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I often find myself thinking, wow, that was like watching a little mini-movie when I read your poems. That is how brilliant and vivid your imagery is. And the emotion! Well, I'm kinda speechless with tears forming there.
I feel not only must I thank you I must also thank Nora for prodding you into posting this.
Awesome.
Tim
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