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[aid] => mick
[title] => Lonely girls muse
[time] => 2004-08-17 18:31:16
[hometext] => I've been trying to sort so many people's problems recently that i forgot my own entirely... This is different..but its basically what has been going through my mind... Thanks for listening....Constructive critisism appreciated.
[bodytext] => I tried to understand myself today,
Perhaps be able to turn my fears away,
Turn the hopelessness into happiness,
But in the end it was all an unfair dream...
...And I wake up to reality and scream...
Loneliness consumes me,
Hungering for another person to leave my side,
While I want to be the one to turn away,
Leave behind this heart, this skin,
Be free....
...And watch myself slip away...
Trust betray's me,
Following down the corridor you took when you left my side,
But I blamed myself for your shortcomings,
And never trusted myself again...
...Because I chased you away...
I blame myself,
For all the things I never did,
And for all times I didnt make it better for myself,
And for you...
But i know it will be better someday...
...It has to be...
And I know myself,
I know that this is just a passing day,
And tommorow may be the same,
But it may be different too,
These feelings will just be yesterdays news,
Just thrown away...
...But they will always lay in wait,
For a time of loneliness like this,
When i have no one to talk to...
Lonely girls muse...
[comments] => 10
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[informant] => lostinmyself
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[score] => 20
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 0
[associated] =>
[topicname] => SadPoetry
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Lonely girls muse
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 06:31:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I tried to understand myself today,
Perhaps be able to turn my fears away,
Turn the hopelessness into happiness,
But in the end it was all an unfair dream...
...And I wake up to reality and scream...
Loneliness consumes me,
Hungering for another person to leave my side,
While I want to be the one to turn away,
Leave behind this heart, this skin,
Be free....
...And watch myself slip away...
Trust betray's me,
Following down the corridor you took when you left my side,
But I blamed myself for your shortcomings,
And never trusted myself again...
...Because I chased you away...
I blame myself,
For all the things I never did,
And for all times I didnt make it better for myself,
And for you...
But i know it will be better someday...
...It has to be...
And I know myself,
I know that this is just a passing day,
And tommorow may be the same,
But it may be different too,
These feelings will just be yesterdays news,
Just thrown away...
...But they will always lay in wait,
For a time of loneliness like this,
When i have no one to talk to...
Lonely girls muse...
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 06:32:47 PM AEST
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| And its meant to be 'turn' not 'purn' sorry |
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 08:18:00 PM AEST
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Great writing but please take it easy on yourself.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 02:18:34 AM AEST
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"Loneliness consumes me,
Hungering for another person to leave my side,"
I think you echo the universal poem of loneliness, with delicate phrasing. May tomorrow be different for you . . . |
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 11:50:15 AM AEST
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Wow! This was powerful. You've said so much here. I don't know which to applaude more---the poem or the person. BRAVO for both!
Stitch |
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 12:41:27 PM AEST
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Awwwww Phil *hugs* you must never forget about time for your own problems and worries, you have a really big heart and I am sure you have made many a sad person smile again, if you need a friendly, mad ear lol you know where to find me,
good write, its nice to see your writes again, I missed them.
pixie xx |
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by katyqueen35 on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 06:40:26 PM AEST
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Awww whats the matter philly are you feeling down or what?Very emotional write kiddo.
hugs. |
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 08:22:12 PM AEST
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This feels like one of those middle of the night moments when you find yourself with only yourself and you can't help but listen... and see... what gets overshadowed during the day. Everyone that has known loneliness will find something of themselves in this, I suspect... I know I did.
...And watch myself slip away...
This grabbed me exactly the same way that a line in Neptune's "Numb" did.... it's a powerful, poignant statement. Those five words alone are worth five starts.
This is.... the heart of a poet, I think
SNM
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 01:56:03 PM AEST
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I love the formatting of this poem, and phil? I can really relate to this at this time. Seems life and loneliness go hand in hand. Be well my friend, brighter days are around the corner.
Angel always...joni |
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 02:36:26 PM AEST
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Aww... Phil, this is sad! But I know those feelings. Hope they fade away soon, and something great takes their place.
Blessings as ever.
Andrew
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Re: Lonely girls muse
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by Merry on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 10:32:52 AM AEST
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A powerful statement, made me think about the many times I have felt this way too. No doubt it is part of human nature to experience such feelings as it seems universal. Well done, excellent write.
merry |
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