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Suicide's Daughter
Contributed by
Moonlitmyst
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Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 09:31:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Tales everchanging
are what she has left me.
And a handful of pictures,
Turning up now and again
In a mess of yellowed papers.
Some claim I look like her.
I try to know her through
My eyes--grey/blue (like hers)
In mirror's effigy.
A clouded visage returned...
Questioning/Grasping.
Salt-water drops betray private
Pinings for forgotten memories,
And those never to be known.
Ironically, concealed evermore,
In graveyard resplendence.
Metamorphosed into a legend,
Turned larger than life by death--
If only words were liberation.
Eternally bound by blood,
She will always be my Mother.
Copyright ©
Moonlitmyst
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2004-08-08 21:31:32]
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by TheBlackVoid on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 01:12:42 AM AEST
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Wow! this poem sent chills down my spine. i admire u now.. my mom and i are both bipolar, and we have both attempted suicde many times..but how u go on i dont know.. if i lost my mom i would go crazy. i'm here if u need to talk. great write! i'm truely touched.
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by pixie on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 11:05:23 AM AEST
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I really feel for you, my biological mum commited suicide when I was 9 years old, I didnt have a relationshoip with her, so didnt really know how to mourn her when she died, I am sorry for your loss and pain, a very emotional and heart wrenching write
takecare
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by Sagacious on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 03:07:31 PM AEST
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Your strength as a writer is most apparent when the subject matter is close to your heart. It is evident, even in the progression of your first few submissions, that you are becoming more skilled as you go. As deftly as you handle rhyme (and you do--these comments should not be construed as to diminish those previous), you are all the more eloquent when freed from that constraint. You are a powerful new voice, and you will be heard.
I love your description of pictures, / Turning up now and again / In a mess of yellowed papers, clearly indicative of the chaos which is left behind when loved ones leave us early. Equally impressive is the "clouded visage returned," as you seek to know your mother through your own eyes, reflected as mirror-image. I can only believe your tears are that which cloud your vision, and they are a part of you, as surely as the image you strive to bring into focus.
Questioning/Grasping...
Here, the poem is bisected beautifully, as the reader is clued in to the true nature of your plight. This sense of incompleteness permeates your being. While putting up a strong front, your tears represent "private pinings" for memories you secretly suspect you have no right to long for. After all, how can you miss what you've never known? Here lies the crux of the matter: yours is a search for identity with no foreseeable conclusion. That the source of your questioning now resides in "graveyard resplendence" is no comfort--and it *is* ironic that cemeteries, which hold such sadness for the survivors of tragedy, should be so outwardly beautiful.
Ultimately, neither poetry, nor the "legend" of that person your mother was, can free you from your search. You are left with one indelible fact: your relationship with her will forever elude satisfactory definition by others. And so, you have but yourself as testiment of the woman who preceded you. Though questions may never cease, I have a feeling she would be proud of the person you've become. As am I--for your poetry speaks volumes never uttered. With thanks for this strong, uncompromising work,
Love Always, -KAC- |
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by backstreetdreamer on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 03:12:07 PM AEST
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Thank you for this poem, you have just mirrored the way I feel about my mother too.
May you always be as happy as you want to be, and may rainbows be your arbor and sunshine your helping hand. Keith
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by AspenGlow on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 05:42:12 AM AEST
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We may look like, sound like, but we are unique unto ourselves, still...we want and seek, that which we may never know...we may give so much more.
You have done your Mother so sweetly, thank you for sharing. |
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 09:50:58 PM AEST
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She will always be my Mother.
Isn't this a huge statement. Having experienced some of what you speak of, I was moved by your words.
NIce job.
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 12:25:26 PM AEST
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This is enormously moving... so reflective and honest and real and powerful. The effect of loss... and love... are far reaching and undeniable. You have honored both your mother and your emotions with piece. And... I suspect... you have/will move many of us for having done so. My eyes were filled with tears as I read this... it is so eloquently presented... painful, yet beautiful. It clearly came from your heart... and it tugs at mine. I am so terribly sorry for your loss. And... even though I don't know you, I feel so very proud of you for writing and posting this piece. It is extraordinary.
I shall hug my mother a little tighter next time I see her...
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 03:26:46 PM AEST
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Sweet Moonlitmyst....
Beautiful write, my friend! Gripping, enchanting, heart-wrenching... All wrapped into one magnificent piece of perfection! Riveting till the end! I am dreadfully sorry for this, I know what it feels like to lose someone very dear to you... Thank you for this life changing write, and may you create more such as this one! Much love to you, and many blessings! It's wonderful to finally meet you.
Your newest friend and fan,
FleurdeSang |
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by pvd on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 06:30:42 AM AEST
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I've had abrother, a cousin and two friends commit suicide. You alway will think about it.
You cover the situation well with this poem. Good write.
PVD |
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by screwup on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 06:18:03 PM AEST
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| wow... this really makes me think about what I am trying to do...and how much it will hurt those around me. Thank you for a great eye-opening poem. |
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Re: Suicide's Daughter
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 10:30:06 AM AEST
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This is quite a good exploration of your feelings and the subject. I'm sure few suicides begin to imagine the legacy they leave behind. Impressive thoughts.
Stitch |
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