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Query of a Phoenix to the Sun

Contributed by ShadowDaughter on Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 08:59:52 PM in AEST
Topic: Lifepoems



A phoenix to the sun said, "auric friend, we're much the same.
Come touch of night, you bleed away, and I succumb to flame;
and in the mornings crystal-frail we rise, newborn, again
but there's the spot our paths diverge-- a case of which and when.

For all the time 'twixt when I die and when I'm born anew
is centuries; and it is merely hours, sun, for you.
Seldom have I birth or death; each day you fade and shine--
so tell me, bright Apollo, is the better yours or mine?"




Copyright © ShadowDaughter ... [ 2004-08-08 20:59:52]
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Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by tlhInganHom on Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 10:53:59 PM AEST
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Wow. That is awesome. Thou, fair maid, art a writer.


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 12:20:27 AM AEST
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some die each day, some live each minute,
If the phoenix lives each minute she will be greater than Apollo...but lo..it is not like that..She is not different from the eternal feminine force of Earth...Though short..this is a brilliant write..I appreciate your question..:-) venkat


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by TheBlackVoid on Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 01:18:48 AM AEST
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Very good write, beautiful :)
Alucia,


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Silent-No-More on Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 01:38:13 AM AEST
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"...just a thought" you say? Well, dear Nora, it is - at a minimum - intelligent thought! This is very well crafted... thought provoking... and, for me, spurs the mind to wonder far beyond the words in front of me.

I like this an awful lot. It's a different sort of attraction this time around, but I'm equally impressed by it. Impressed, perhaps, in a different sort of way - but impressed nonetheless.

Keep thinkin', keep writin', and I'll keepa readin',
SNM


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by MoonlitAngel on Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 10:24:26 AM AEST
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Interesting... well, at least for once I get it. lol.

~ Dee


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by MoonlitMyst on Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 06:01:14 PM AEST
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I feel kinda sheepish posting just under "MoonlitAngel," but I promise, 'tis just a mere coincidence. This is an incredible poem--my favorite on this site. I think I'm too tired to comment and length and give your poem the praise it deserves, but I couldn't leave this masterpiece without at least saying something. You have a genuine talent!


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by theMoth on Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 07:30:22 PM AEST
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This was more adventurous than what I usually read on here, it's exciting to see even a little poem like this. Groovy.--the Moth


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 09:40:38 PM AEST
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terrific write- I love that it makes me think awhile on my own perspective. Nicely dine, and as always, you have a wonderful way with words.


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Sagacious on Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 10:18:38 PM AEST
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This truly great poem matches--and, in many cases, exceeds--the work of virtually any famous author of the past two hundred years. I'm sure some will find that claim to be exaggerated, but its sincerity cannot be. Rhythmically perfect, "Query" features a number of exemplary qualities: a grand theme briefly stated, brilliant use of language ("auric friend" comes to mind), and geometric synchronicity. This is, indisputably, a product of uncompromising talent.

There will always be room in our literature for pithy observations on life, death, rebirth, and resurrection. Yours are among the finest examples, thereof: as such, your timelessness is assured. Thank you for this magnificent post. Gratefully, -KAC-


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 11:17:02 AM AEST
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It was beautiful when i heard it and it is beautiful now. I'm sorry i took so long to see this.

Many hugs,
Phil xxx


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Vitreous_Soul on Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 06:20:40 PM AEST
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Extremely interesting thoughts, and further contemplation would most likely lead me to a mental institution lol. I love how effortlessly you are able to put forth such complex ideas, and the fact that it is so polished serves to show how brilliant this is at every level. Immaculately done.

Passenger on a missile pointed at the sun,
-V.S.


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Fionndruinne on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 03:20:17 PM AEST
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As I said originally, this is splendid. Your use of language is simply brilliant.
*applauds happily*
Nicely done, friend Nora.

Andrew


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 04:39:17 PM AEST
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If I were ever to speak on behalf of the sun, I'd say the sun, being non-mythical, yet entirely mortal in itself.

In reality, the sun never fades for those whom see days, but for his sisters in the sky, Helios is as but a transference/trasmutation of energy . . .

Well - I don't think the sun will ask me to step in for him anytime soon, so I'll utter 'nice eight-liner; Thoroughly enjoyable' and be done with it . . .


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Nazmythian on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 07:36:12 PM AEST
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That is such an incredible piece of artistic perfection.

Now I wonder, if the memories of each life time carry over into the next. And I wonder, if the sun, due to its daily rebirth might not have the better of it - in that the pain of life might have less effect. This is, all of course strictly hypethetical ~ for, what do I know ...

Naz ~


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by EternitysLyre on Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 11:00:40 AM AEST
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Just as a passing note, the sun never quite actually fades and shines--

something a phoenix should know.

The poem itself is great, but who needs little old me to tell you that? (emphasis on little, and throw ugly in there if you can.)

Since this isn't quite a critique, I'll not end it with a corny assessment of the poem, or a quote. And I like phoenixes better.


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Cynthia on Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 07:57:47 PM AEST
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Nora, this is the kind of write that makes a person think. Excellent work. *S* Cynthia


Re: Query of a Phoenix to the Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by gt on Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 05:37:53 PM AEST
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cool idea, great poem, but I'd like to see it linked into something more. Maybe just because I like phoenixes




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