Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com - Read, Rate, Comment on, or Submit Poetry. Browse Poetry Forums, or just enjoy other parts of our poetic community.
One of the largest databases of poetry on the net, now over 198,500+ poems!
Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com    Poems On Site: 198,500+   Comments On Poems: 427,000+   Forum Posts: 105,000+
Custom Search
  Welcome ! Home  ·  FAQ  ·  Topics  ·  Web Links  ·  Your Account  ·  Submit Poetry  ·  Top 30  ·  OldSite Link 29-May 13:37:58 AEST  
  Menu
  Home
· Micks Shop
· Our eBay Store· Error Submit
 Poetry
· Submit Poetry
· Least Read Poems
· Topics
· Members Listing
· Old Site Post 2001
· Old Site Pre 2001
· Poetry Archive
· Public Domain Poetry
 Stories
· Stories (NEW ! )
· Submit Story
· Story Topics
· Stories Archive
· Story Search
  Community
· Our Poetry Forums
· Our Arcade
100's of Games !

  Site Help
· FAQ
· Feedback

  Members Areas
· Your Account
· Members Journals
· Premium Sign-Up
  Premium Section
· Special Section
· Premium Poems
· Premium Submit
· Premium Search
· Premium Top
· Premium Archive
· Premium Topics
 Fun & Games

· Jokes
· Bubble Puzzle
· ConnectN
· Cross Word
· Cross Word Easy
· Drag Puzzle
· Word Hunt
 Reference
· Dictionary
· Dictionary (Rhyming)
· Site Updates
· Content
· Special Content
 Search
· Search
· Web Links
· All Links
 Top
· Top 30
  Help This Site
· Donations
 Others
· Recipes
· Moderators
Our Other Sites
· Embroidery Design Store
· Your Jokes
· Special Urls
· JM Embroideries
· Public Domain Poetry and Stories
· Diamond Dotz
· Cooking Info and Recipes
· Quoof - Australian Story

  Social

Array ( [sid] => 59202 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Battle Me [time] => 2004-08-06 23:40:22 [hometext] => This is my first poem. I wasnt sure what to put it under so i put it under Psychotic poems because it is about fighting mentally/emotionally with yourself. Please comment and tell me what you think and give suggestions. [bodytext] => I gave it once,
I gave it twice
It hurts so bad
And I don’t know why…
Go away, leave me here
Soaking in all my fears.
Chew me up, spit me out
Throw my soul all about
It’s nothing new
Look at me now
Loved by so few
Give it up, stop playing this game
Nothing will ever again be the same
I know what I did, I ruined your life
I am the reason behind your every strife
If you leave, I will die
Into the dark I will fly
To watch you from the sky
The life is hurt, so take it now
Shoot me, come on, make it hurt
I see your blood
Its washing over me, as if it’s the flood
I have secrets that you wouldn’t understand
So in my heart is where they will stay
At least until that fatal day
When, I shoot you once
I shoot you twice
It hurts so bad
And I don’t know why…

[comments] => 6 [counter] => 164 [topic] => 59 [informant] => NobodySpecial [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 8 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => psychoticpoems )
Battle Me

Contributed by NobodySpecial on Friday, 6th August 2004 @ 11:40:22 PM in AEST
Topic: psychoticpoems



I gave it once,
I gave it twice
It hurts so bad
And I don’t know why…
Go away, leave me here
Soaking in all my fears.
Chew me up, spit me out
Throw my soul all about
It’s nothing new
Look at me now
Loved by so few
Give it up, stop playing this game
Nothing will ever again be the same
I know what I did, I ruined your life
I am the reason behind your every strife
If you leave, I will die
Into the dark I will fly
To watch you from the sky
The life is hurt, so take it now
Shoot me, come on, make it hurt
I see your blood
Its washing over me, as if it’s the flood
I have secrets that you wouldn’t understand
So in my heart is where they will stay
At least until that fatal day
When, I shoot you once
I shoot you twice
It hurts so bad
And I don’t know why…





Copyright © NobodySpecial ... [ 2004-08-06 23:40:22]
(Date/Time posted on site)





Advertisments:






Previous Posted Poem         | |         Next Posted Poem


 
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title etc.
Re: Battle Me (User Rating: 1 )
by TheRaven on Saturday, 7th August 2004 @ 02:00:43 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
very, very good for your first write. not bad with the rhyme, kind of felt forced sometimes. but very nice, good emotion. maybe try conveying that same emotion without the rhyme? still well-written, keep it up i'll keep an eye out for 'em.....
the raven


Re: Battle Me (User Rating: 1 )
by deadreckoning1983 on Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 02:34:00 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
The Raven is right, sometimes froced on the rhyming but still good. just remember keep it simple if a word doesnt belong throw it out. can't wait to read more!


Re: Battle Me (User Rating: 1 )
by CrimsonTears on Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 01:50:44 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
this is good for your first poem...but like everyone said the rhyming is a lil forced...but overall its a great write...good job and keep writing

Lots of Love
CrimsonTears


Re: Battle Me (User Rating: 1 )
by Trisha on Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:32:15 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
this was good.


Re: Battle Me (User Rating: 1 )
by destinyfate on Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 06:58:16 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
I like it.All except the fact someone actually feeling this way but you released feelings well.
Destiny Fate


Re: Battle Me (User Rating: 1 )
by Always on Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 06:06:50 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
Too close to home....nice..




While every care is taken to ensure the general sites content is family safe, our moderators cannot be in all places; all the time. Please report poetry and or comments that are in breach of our site rules HERE (Please include poem title or url). Parents also please ensure that you supervise your children well when they are on the internet; regardless of what a site says about being, or being considered, child-safe.

Poetry is much like a great photo, a single "moment in time" capturing many feelings and emotions. Yet, they are very alive; creating stirrings within the readers who form visual "pictures" of the expressed emotions within the Poem. ©

Opinions expressed in the poetry, comments, forums etc. on this site are not necessarily those of this site, its owners and/or operators; but of the individuals who post items to this site.
Frequently Asked Questions | | | Privacy Policy | | | Contact Webmaster

All submitted items are Copyright © to their submitter. All the rest Copyright © 2002-2050 by Your Poetry Dot Com

All logos and trademarks in this site are property of their respective owners.

Script Generation Time: 0.052 Seconds. - View our Site Map | .© your-poetry.com