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The Day You Left
Contributed by
iluvpencils
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Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 03:53:48 PM in AEST
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The day you left us,
The clouds were crying
The day you left,
The sky was gray
I looked over my shoulder
You were still there
Standing in the cold
But only for a moment
The rain washed you away
The day you left,
I wanted to die
I wanted to bleed the pain away
I stared at your picture
To remind myself of then
So long ago
Just yesterday
Will things ever be that way again?
You were smiling
So alive
Still with us
But you left
You're gone
The day you left,
I cried until my eyes were red
Until I thought that they would bleed
I felt so empty,
I felt so cold
Left out in the rain alone
I remember just wanting you to be happy
But not wanting to bear
The sadness inside me
Will this ever end?
Will we ever be a whole again?
Come back
Come back
So we can be a family again
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iluvpencils
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2004-08-04 15:53:48]
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Re: The Day You Left
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th August 2004 @ 03:32:23 AM AEST
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This is a lovely dedication to someone whom, if they read it, would feel very comforted, i'm sure.
I like your use of rhyme & rhythm too.
Keep writing. |
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Re: The Day You Left
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by pixie on
Thursday, 5th August 2004 @ 05:19:52 AM AEST
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Awwww *hugs* this is a lovely poem , your friend would feel very special when she reads this :) the pain will ease off in time, you'll see
takecare,
pixie xx |
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