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Array ( [sid] => 58678 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => as i lay [time] => 2004-08-03 07:42:05 [hometext] => [bodytext] => this world is getting heavier on my shoulders
feels like my collar bone is gunna collapse
these words seem to control us
even though they make no sense
this gun sounds so peaceful
as the bullet rips my heart to shreds

your eyes look so cold
but yet there so intense
those eyes take a hold
i feel so helpless

i,m not scared of this gun in my hand
and i know it won't hurt
i just want to be free again
but yiou won't seem to help me
i,m not scared of dying but you have pushed me to the edge
i don't want to go
but i have had enough of this
as my body lay still in a pool of my suicidal blood
my thoughts are blank i am at peace as i lay dead
[comments] => 4 [counter] => 182 [topic] => 6 [informant] => grip-wth-broken-fingers [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => AngryPoetry )

as i lay

Contributed by grip-wth-broken-fingers on Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 07:42:05 AM in AEST
Topic: AngryPoetry

this world is getting heavier on my shoulders
feels like my collar bone is gunna collapse
these words seem to control us
even though they make no sense
this gun sounds so peaceful
as the bullet rips my heart to shreds

your eyes look so cold
but yet there so intense
those eyes take a hold
i feel so helpless

i,m not scared of this gun in my hand
and i know it won't hurt
i just want to be free again
but yiou won't seem to help me
i,m not scared of dying but you have pushed me to the edge
i don't want to go
but i have had enough of this
as my body lay still in a pool of my suicidal blood
my thoughts are blank i am at peace as i lay dead

Copyright © grip-wth-broken-fingers ... [ 2004-08-03 07:42:05]
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Re: as i lay (User Rating: 1 )
by poet_of_anger on Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 07:57:47 AM AEST
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Wow, very powerful words. Great write, very well done, your thoughts and emotions are clearly seen through your words.

Re: as i lay (User Rating: 1 )
by JT on Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 08:04:13 AM AEST
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powerfull write. it always looks like such a long way up when your at rock bottom, but at least you know you cant fall any further.
-jt-

Re: as i lay (User Rating: 1 )
by lovespoetic0518 on Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 08:10:57 AM AEST
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Very intense, I really hope that you can resolve whatever is bothering you, and put away that gun. A person who wants to fight there problems will succeed rather than a person who doesn't care. take care.

Kimberly :)

Re: as i lay (User Rating: 1 )
by MomentInTime on Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 09:42:25 AM AEST
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My first thought: if someone or something is pushing, push back. It's a better solution than pushing up daisies.

Jordan oxo

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