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Deja Vu
Contributed by
rissa
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Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 07:58:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Echo, Echo.
Deja vu.
Caught in choppy waves
With no way through.
Murderous landscape
Stormy seas
Bipolar forest
Of submerged trees.
Falling stars
That hit the ground
Desperate screams
That make no sound.
Bloody scars
And empty soul
Through hollow eyes
And endless holes.
So sick inside;
Inside and out
Torn up outside
By fear and doubt.
Always alone
And standards fail
Lied to myself
Others' betrayal.
Nightmares come true
And dreams unreal
Affection around
That I can't feel.
Bloody teardrops
In broken rain
The ones I love
Causing my pain.
Eyes watching from
Darkened shadows:
As memories come
Happiness goes.
A stick of morphine
Written forget
It leaves to pay
Some unknown debt.
Cough up the blood
As it seeps through.
Echo, echo.
Deja vu.
Copyright ©
rissa
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Re: Deja Vu
(User Rating: 1 ) by RobertKilpatrick on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 08:42:41 PM AEST (User
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I liked it. |
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Re: Deja Vu
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 10:38:57 PM AEST (User
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beautiful expression of feelings, i love that echo echo............. hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Deja Vu
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eve on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 10:34:30 AM AEST (User
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Essence of poetry, Rissa; truly. The depth is absolutely incredible, and although it's not very long, you just can't speed through reading this. I'm sure I'd have to dissect every line to understand this to its fullest...
...But then, you've always been enigmatic.
It's what makes you such an amazing person. Black roses, glass roses, and crimson red roses. You amaze me further.
Keep writing,
-Eve(h). |
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Re: Deja Vu
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 03:25:01 PM AEST (User
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Somehoe 'Written forget' stands out.
I'm assuming this isn't two actions/verbs whatever, but forgetfulness written?
It made me smile. I like the way you thought that through, even though its a fraction of the spectrum of which you managed to express in this write.
Impressive. Well done. |
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