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Hidden Velvet
Contributed by
Soulless
on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 08:37:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Your darkened colors don’t show brightly
In the sunlight
There may be more than meets the eye
I’ll prove them wrong
I’ll show them all who you really are
Chorus:
Everyday I’m only looking through
Let me pear inside and find you
And every day I’m cut again
By broken shard of you untrue
You may not be for show and tell
But you’re my pet I’ll keep you well
You may be rough around the edges
But I see the sparks of magic
Let me feel your hidden velvet
CHORUS
I knew it all along
Show me through the other side
The one your heart lies
I can’t go on playing along
Give me all the truth
Instead of laying me in pieces of you
CHORUS
All this time I should have known
I’ve been trapped in your heartless box
If not here where do you lay?
CHORUS
Copyright ©
Soulless
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2004-07-01 20:37:50] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Hidden Velvet
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kindredblood_dragon on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 09:17:36 PM AEST (User
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As with All feeling where what and why always seem to be the ones where answers are always short coming....or few and far between.
This was beatifully written and composed, and your talent shines through once again, You bought forth an image which remains, of sadness, loss, and that trapped feeling we all go through one time or another, Excellent write keep it up as I look for ward to more.
Take care always
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Re: Hidden Velvet
(User Rating: 1 ) by blueheart on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 10:04:40 PM AEST (User
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This is nothing short of being amazing.
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Re: Hidden Velvet
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 10:19:26 PM AEST (User
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this didn't strike me as dark although, as Karl stated earlier, it was beautifully written. I liked the chorus it was 'funky'. I don't believe I have ever used 'funky' to describe a poem but I guess it would be a good time to start.
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Re: Hidden Velvet
(User Rating: 1 ) by Mortis-Dark on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 11:18:40 PM AEST (User
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This poem is DARK. If you knew poetry you would know what this poem really means. Its a a great tell in its own. You never cease to amaze me, you just keep us looming in the dark with these brillant writes.
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Re: Hidden Velvet
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 07:23:55 AM AEST (User
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wonderful poem
pixie xx |
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Re: Hidden Velvet
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 12:40:14 AM AEST (User
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truely beautiful:) hugs n' love nessa
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