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[aid] => mick
[title] => Echoes of You
[time] => 2004-06-28 11:06:32
[hometext] => Well, I finally wrote something again. It's sort of sad and... wistful. Really not sure what else to say about it.
[bodytext] => The cold tears a hole
Widening the space between
Bringing more emptiness
Pushing me harder
As he draws me closer
Till I'm further away than ever before
The mind's silent screams
As I fall down to pray
For love not deceiving
Drive me to the edge
And there I see your face
Though it's blank, in my heart, you're all that I know
And there's nothing at all I'm gaining by standing right here
And nothing to lose with nothing invested in you
As every time I walk away
I wish that I would find a place
Where I can disappear forever
Where no one ever handles me
But always understands
I pray to be numb
For these tears to just freeze and fall away
To not have a reason
To care what you do or what you say
To want to run away
No heart to be broken and no love to waste
I bleed and I lose
I cry and you take it
I'm me and you hate it
I do all I can
And you're never happy
But I can't remember the last time I was
There's a ghost in the mirror
(Suddenly I know exactly what you meant)
The more I scream the more I fade
(But the more I feel, I wonder if I am)
You don't want to be here
And it's my fault
There is no love in you
But here I stay
Withering so painfully
Still I can't see any other way
(There's no way around this)
But your name, it echoes off the sky
And for that moment I wonder why
(Why you haunt me as I cry)
[comments] => 17
[counter] => 759
[topic] => 48
[informant] => MoonlitAngel
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[score] => 51
[ratings] => 11
[editpoem] => 1
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Echoes of You
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MoonlitAngel
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Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 11:06:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
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The cold tears a hole
Widening the space between
Bringing more emptiness
Pushing me harder
As he draws me closer
Till I'm further away than ever before
The mind's silent screams
As I fall down to pray
For love not deceiving
Drive me to the edge
And there I see your face
Though it's blank, in my heart, you're all that I know
And there's nothing at all I'm gaining by standing right here
And nothing to lose with nothing invested in you
As every time I walk away
I wish that I would find a place
Where I can disappear forever
Where no one ever handles me
But always understands
I pray to be numb
For these tears to just freeze and fall away
To not have a reason
To care what you do or what you say
To want to run away
No heart to be broken and no love to waste
I bleed and I lose
I cry and you take it
I'm me and you hate it
I do all I can
And you're never happy
But I can't remember the last time I was
There's a ghost in the mirror
(Suddenly I know exactly what you meant)
The more I scream the more I fade
(But the more I feel, I wonder if I am)
You don't want to be here
And it's my fault
There is no love in you
But here I stay
Withering so painfully
Still I can't see any other way
(There's no way around this)
But your name, it echoes off the sky
And for that moment I wonder why
(Why you haunt me as I cry)
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MoonlitAngel
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Re: Echoes of You
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by pixie on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 11:14:17 AM AEST
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awwwww this is so sad *hugs you* hope that in time your pain will feel less raw..
pixie xx |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by Black13 on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 12:08:51 PM AEST
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"There's a ghost in the mirror
(Suddenly I know exactly what you meant)"
"I cry and you take it
I'm me and you hate it"
I understand this one...
After reading it 5 times I still find myself at a loss for words Dee.
I'm going to say beautiful and powerful because it's all i find myself capable of saying.
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Re: Echoes of You
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 02:02:27 PM AEST
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Dee, these are extremely hard emotions to put to paper. You did an excellent job. I hope you can find a way to get through this hole and come out stronger on the other side.
Rita |
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 03:32:50 PM AEST
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Awwwww Moonlit....Once again, my heart goes out to you......
(((((hugs))))))
Jenni |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 06:04:11 PM AEST
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Hit a personal note. I can relate to certain parts of this quite well . . .
You have written something I found involving and evocative. I like being involved in such an emotionally intense write as this.
Keep writing. |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by blueheart on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 09:56:07 PM AEST
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Wow, you placed your emotions so well into words.
Simply incredible, great write.
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Re: Echoes of You
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by TheReturnOfx7 on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 10:09:11 PM AEST
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*jaw drops*
.................I suddenly remember every reason why I ever loved any of your poems.....wow..... |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by BrandySwanson on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 11:15:27 PM AEST
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what an emotional and powerful write. wished i could write my true emotions as you did in this one. thanks for sharing this with us all. i can relate to some of this myself. well done excellent poem .
Brandy |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 11:07:51 AM AEST
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aww dee, you sound so closed in sweetie, beautiful poem written through some tears im sure but so well expressed, you touch us all:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Echoes of You
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by Black13 on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 10:48:29 PM AEST
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Yeah... This is your 'Alpha fades Omega' in a way. Because... I still can't grasp it fully. I understand it but I can't sort it out fully.
I like this one too much as you can tell I'm still reading it. :D |
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 11:25:13 PM AEST
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Wow! Geeessssh.... this is incredible, Dee! This is so full of you and your emotions... but, yet... somehow some of us (myself completely included) find it relatable. Amazing... truly, truly amazing.
I bleed and I lose
I cry and you take it
I'm me and you hate it
You had me from the beginning - but, you blew me away when I got to these lines. And... and... when I got to the last three lines - geez - you just totaled me. The ending is sheer perfection. Glorious!
Amazed by you,
SNM |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 07:43:49 AM AEST
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I cannot believe i missed this.
There was not a word that didnt hit me..but i must say these hit me the hardest.
"I pray to be numb
For these tears to just freeze and fall away"
I have no idea what else to say, you have me totally in awe.
Please never stop writing Dee.
Thankyou so much for sharing.
*hugs you lots*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 11:18:15 PM AEST
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Well, Dee, no ink in your pen, no words in your head, for months upon months upon months, and here this is born and it seems almost worth every last second when the words wouldn't come.
I like the way Jeff put it, about this being sort of your 'Alpha fades Omega', in a sense . . . and you know how powerful / jaw-dropping / fascinating / mysteriously-not-quite-entirely-comprehendible I found that to be. Quite the same on this one.
This is beauty in its purest, rawest form, and I can't say better.
As for the poem's subject, there's not much I can say. Some of it I understand all too well, and some I, well . . . don't. All I can say is I hope you someday get ever inch of what you deserve to have. And if you ever, EVER need someone to talk to . . . need a shoulder . . . need a hand . . . need a friend . . . need anything at all . . . I fully expect to find you climbing through the window of my bedroom at 4 am, okay? :-) :-P
love ya, Dee.
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Re: Echoes of You
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 10:00:02 AM AEST
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I see the crossroads coming for you. Decisions to be made.
The crossroads is a place of arrival.
I have been there.
I made the right decision, but it was only right for me.
Yours will be your own.
I'll pray for you. I hope that's OK.
Stitch |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by lovesucks on
Thursday, 16th September 2004 @ 12:40:02 PM AEST
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This is AWESOME
"And there is no love in you
But here I stay
Withering so painfully
Still can't see another way"
I can relate keep writing I've read some of your work I love it.......you are so expressive an inspiration |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 04:28:00 PM AEST
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wow!!.....I can see why everyone loves this so. It is full of raw emotion....desolution, despondancy....
Vivid, vivid images and feelings! |
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Re: Echoes of You
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 29th November 2007 @ 05:36:38 PM AEST
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Heart wrenching, I think, describes this best. Not only because you put so much you in this, virtually pouring your soul out, but also because it reaches out and grabs hold of listening hearts, and speaks of deep pain.
Take care, please.
David |
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