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Barely Breathing
Contributed by
Alyshia
on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:10:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Sitting at home in the dark, alone
My feelings are silently forming a cyclone
I'm barely living, barely breathing
I feel so empty since you left me
I'm waiting for a happy moment
To help me take my mind off it
Looking forward to a brighter tomorrow
To help remove this blackened sorrow
I'm barely living, barely breathing
I'm barely moving, barely anything
I finally understand what you see me as
I wish I could have what she now has
I'm just a waste of space
Who could easily be replaced
I can't stand to look at my reflection
It only reminds me of your rejection
I'm barely living, barely breathing
I'm barely feeling anything
You took everything when you left
You left me feeling lost, bereft
I'm barely living, barely breathing
I'm barely doing anything
I feel so lost, alone, and broken
I can hear your words not spoken
It could have ended differently
You could still be here with me
I'm barely living, barely breathing
I barely know who I am blaming
Copyright ©
Alyshia
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2004-06-23 17:10:43]
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Re: Barely Breathing
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by yellow_sundragon on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:13:40 PM AEST
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Seems as if you're barely hanging on.... but this poem is truly said and well written...
Peace for your Soul
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Re: Barely Breathing
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:24:14 PM AEST
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I really liked this and I know how you are feeling or were feeling or were I dont know what tense to use it in well I really liked it a lot and I want you to just keep your head high...you cant run out of breath not now...not for a long ass time...I like your writing beautiful piece...keep it up keep it coming...
read and comment my stuff if you want Id love to hear what you think...
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Re: Barely Breathing
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by Whisper on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 07:53:42 PM AEST
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Nice write.
Whisper |
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Re: Barely Breathing
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by evilfairy on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 08:40:32 PM AEST
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A sad piece but fantastically written.
i like the different style and the repetitive strain within the poem |
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Re: Barely Breathing
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by pixie on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 07:05:52 AM AEST
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((((HUGS))))) i think you could do with them , this is such a sad piece, i really feel for you, as I know of this feeling your speak
pixie xx |
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