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to make you feel this way
i'd try to take it back
if it would take this away
i'd rip out my heart,
serve it to you on a platter.
does anything i do
ever really matter?
i'd pluck out my eyes
serve them to you in a drink.
if i only thought
that would just make you think.
i'd give up my life for you,
heart mind and soul.
i'd send myself
straight down that hellhole.
what ever you want
or need just ask.
i promise that we
will not repeat your past.
i love you so much
i pains me to say it.
please just tell me
if you think i'm unfit.
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Unfit

Contributed by MDodgen on Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 11:20:40 AM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

i don't know what i did
to make you feel this way
i'd try to take it back
if it would take this away
i'd rip out my heart,
serve it to you on a platter.
does anything i do
ever really matter?
i'd pluck out my eyes
serve them to you in a drink.
if i only thought
that would just make you think.
i'd give up my life for you,
heart mind and soul.
i'd send myself
straight down that hellhole.
what ever you want
or need just ask.
i promise that we
will not repeat your past.
i love you so much
i pains me to say it.
please just tell me
if you think i'm unfit.

Copyright © MDodgen ... [ 2004-06-23 11:20:40]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Unfit (User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 11:30:47 AM AEST
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sorry you feel this way Mel......

thanks for sharing this with us all.. you written it well

pixie xx

Re: Unfit (User Rating: 1 )
by wikedladi on Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 10:53:07 PM AEST
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NIce outlet of emotions mel. i like it alot! i complete feel how you are feeling.

love you!

Re: Unfit (User Rating: 1 )
by holderofthestone on Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 02:12:10 PM AEST
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we all make our own mistakes. after all we are only human. you have an incredible written ability I always enjoy reading your poems. this ones no different just a little sad. you are soooo much more than unfit, your a perfect fit.... A++++

Re: Unfit (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 10:36:25 PM AEST
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well done emotional write. mistakes and failures make you travel different roads than you were before, so good luck traveling them.

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