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[sid] => 53255
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Let Go
[time] => 2004-06-22 21:31:06
[hometext] =>
[bodytext] => Turn the pencil over
And erase my heart
Delete me
Don’t even let it start
Turn the corner now
And hide in the dark
Lose me
Move even farther apart
Take my memories
Eliminate the dream
Shake me
Just ignore my screams
Let go your grip
Release the lock
Free me
Then silence the clock
Paint black over blue
Remove my head
Kill me
I’d rather be dead
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 188
[topic] => 61
[informant] => Silent-No-More
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 20
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
Let Go
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 09:31:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Turn the pencil over
And erase my heart
Delete me
Don’t even let it start
Turn the corner now
And hide in the dark
Lose me
Move even farther apart
Take my memories
Eliminate the dream
Shake me
Just ignore my screams
Let go your grip
Release the lock
Free me
Then silence the clock
Paint black over blue
Remove my head
Kill me
I’d rather be dead
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2004-06-22 21:31:06]
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Re: Let Go
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by evilfairy on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 09:37:55 PM AEST
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Awesome poem silent!
i don't know what to say about it but it's huge!
strong, blunt and painful..... |
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Re: Let Go
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by JT on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 10:07:11 PM AEST
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I agree. Strong, painfull, to the point. What more can I say. good write
-jt- |
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Re: Let Go
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 10:16:02 PM AEST
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| powerful write |
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Re: Let Go
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:06:29 PM AEST
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Whoa, talk about strong emotions. This is awesome. I hope this is just a poem and not your life or feelings. Great, fantastic, terrific write.
Rita |
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Re: Let Go
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 08:00:10 AM AEST
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wow this was great......soo powerful
pixie xx |
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Re: Let Go
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 02:26:40 PM AEST
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oh... sooo sad, are you alright my friend? hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Let Go
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by ShadowDaughter on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 02:44:59 PM AEST
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Well, it's a well-written poem, certainly . . .
*bites lip* Hope you're doing far, far better than this paints you as being. May smiles come your way :).
--Nora |
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Re: Let Go
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by venkat on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 01:44:17 AM AEST
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| Emotional very sharp expression.. venkat |
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Re: Let Go
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by rhymeandreason on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 04:22:32 PM AEST
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Very good write, You earned the four for sure. Another journey I see down the pathos path that is the only lonely way through this particular dark forest, that is until it reaches its end and becomes the twin paths fork of knowledge and remores. Bear left and take that knowledge path that widens into a real and level roasd called understanding. That would be my advice to you. Never you mind where that other path will take you. It eventually peters out in some unlocatable location. You should know that you have no monopoly on this angst and raw emotional rollercoaster thing. I can wax somewhat poetic on the subject of being roasted slow as in that's all I know of life or remember it ever being genre of poetry. Which I would rather see someone explore until they have had their fill of being ill and find that their heart/head/soul is on the mend. As opposed to those that would rather write exclusively about their rage and seething hatered for any and all aspects of this life that they didn't ask for, (unless they did but don't remember, hmmmm.) but nonetheless must endure, so consequently, the only thing that makes it bearable is the complete loathing they feel for themselves, the world around them, and oh yes, especially you and all the others that have taken the time to read their manifesto
of rage. Seeth On!!! I am sure that you have found a few of these in your travels down the wordway road.
I just wanted to respond as well to your last comment as to my offer to "quwestion" my tale. I thank you for believing that my story as to what is transpiring out here is fact. I wasn't
suggesting that you were the kind of person that would give a person no benifit of the doubt right out of the gate. Here is what I was trying to convey more than anything else. If you were to "believe" me with all your heart, and called 50 people a day in an attempt to help me in this matter because of your strong belief, it will gain few people who would be willing to add their voice to mine and a few of my friends out here. On the other hand, if you were to familiarize yourself with the facts of the case, and the reasons that these facts came into play, and what any person of average intelligence or better can gain in the way of an understanding of this matter, by use of basic reason and logic, then: If you only made one or two calls a week. If you only mailed one or two letters a week. You in both cases would be imediately percieved as a person that is aware of the various aspects of the matter. And the arguments that will most certainly be raised by whoever it is you might be talking to, as to his reluctance to concede that such might be so, can be answered in a manner that eventually will bring that person to the point of taking a closer look which will bring him as well to the understanding that this indeed is going on. On top of this, you are an intelligent, and as I have told you in one of my comments, "intuitive" as well. There are still moves left to me in my attempt to get free of these peoples clutches and make public what is going on. There are still moves left for the people who have done these things that they hope will finally extricate them from the public gaining knowledge of what they have done, which leads to; CONSEQUENCES THAT THEY WOULD LIKE TO AVOID AS WELL.
Also, I believe that you will find the entire story and how everything has unfolded, a very interesting read. A read that the ending of which is still to be written. I would appreciate your help in making as sure as we possibly can that the ending is happy, just truthful ,and educational as well, to all that read or hear it, as to how weak our hold on our rights really are, and how quickly they can be gone. The biggest hurdle I have with over coming someones doubt that this might be true is: "Why would they do all this to you?" The truthful answer to this and the only one that will make sense to the person who asks it is: This isn't about me as an individual that is being picked on because they don't like me. This is about what I accidently learned as to the major pollution of the groundwater in my hometown by two of the wealthiest landowners in the county and their attempts with the help of some in city and county governments help. to cover this up. "WHY WOULD SOME IN COUNTY GOVT, HELP? ANSWER: Because with 200 million of their 400 million dollars worth of comm. real estate in Ventura Co. The long term developement plans of the city and county are intertwined. Because for over thirty years these two men have been at the apex of political/ financial/social power in this county. Consequently, they have a lot of "chips" in the "game" ( local business and politics) Because it was easy to do initially, and not becomeing a situation that any of those involved could see coming to light until someone put it together.(me) then made worse by them by buying into the belief that each illegal ratcheting up of the pressure on me to "take the deal" and stop short of this getting on the record, would actually do so. etc. etc. This is why I wanted you to read, and come to your own conclusions as to what is going on.
I'll talk to you later, as I have to take care of a few things. Talk to you on the round-a bout. R&R Sorry snm about once again writing an epic wordthicket for you to wade through. I will try to do better. |
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Re: Let Go
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 07:55:47 PM AEST
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| Geeze, this one really takes a giant stab at those ol' heart strings. I am thrilled to know you are still here with us. |
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