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[sid] => 53090
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => I wont go on without you
[time] => 2004-06-21 22:17:46
[hometext] => sort of long and very dark.
[bodytext] => listenening to you echo
your words are in my head
its all I ever hear
I pray that I was dead
then I may be able
to escape your grip
when finally to death
my beating heart may slip
you took so much of me
when you left that day
I wish I had the words
but there are none left to say
I know you'll never know
how much I care for you
I know you'll never care
so heres what I will do
I'll sneak into to your house
and wait for you to sleep
and when you eyes are closed
this is when I'll creep
out from the darkness
with tape and rope in hand
to grab you while you dream
and make my final stand
tape your mouth and hold you
as you snap awake
knowing this is wrong
but this is what it takes
I tell you not to struggle
dont put up a fight
and I promise that I won't
hurt you here tonight
tie your hands and feet
and throw you on my shoulder
now that you are bound
Im feeling so much bolder
in the center of the room
I tie you to a chair
to make my last plee
where you'll have to stare
I'll tell you of my pain
and what I feel inside
the true me will come out
no longer will he hide
you never would listen
I know you didnt hear
everytime I told you
how much I truly care
but you will know it now
you'll see it all to clear
when I pull out my gun
its message we will share
you'll try to plead out to me
you always had the words
but this time they are stuffled
and they will go unheard
I'll tell of my love for you
how much I miss your touch
how much you added to me
but then you took away so much
I wont go on without you
there is no chance at life
without you by my side
without you as my wife
and since you wont be with me
then im already dead
since your tied up here
I'll put a bullet in my head
I hope you see it all
I hope the pain endures
then you"ll know the venom
from which there is no cure
the portal of these memories
like you trapped me in
and then your life of hurt
will hopefully begin
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 292
[topic] => 13
[informant] => holderofthestone
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 24
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
)
I wont go on without you
Contributed by
holderofthestone
on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 10:17:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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listenening to you echo
your words are in my head
its all I ever hear
I pray that I was dead
then I may be able
to escape your grip
when finally to death
my beating heart may slip
you took so much of me
when you left that day
I wish I had the words
but there are none left to say
I know you'll never know
how much I care for you
I know you'll never care
so heres what I will do
I'll sneak into to your house
and wait for you to sleep
and when you eyes are closed
this is when I'll creep
out from the darkness
with tape and rope in hand
to grab you while you dream
and make my final stand
tape your mouth and hold you
as you snap awake
knowing this is wrong
but this is what it takes
I tell you not to struggle
dont put up a fight
and I promise that I won't
hurt you here tonight
tie your hands and feet
and throw you on my shoulder
now that you are bound
Im feeling so much bolder
in the center of the room
I tie you to a chair
to make my last plee
where you'll have to stare
I'll tell you of my pain
and what I feel inside
the true me will come out
no longer will he hide
you never would listen
I know you didnt hear
everytime I told you
how much I truly care
but you will know it now
you'll see it all to clear
when I pull out my gun
its message we will share
you'll try to plead out to me
you always had the words
but this time they are stuffled
and they will go unheard
I'll tell of my love for you
how much I miss your touch
how much you added to me
but then you took away so much
I wont go on without you
there is no chance at life
without you by my side
without you as my wife
and since you wont be with me
then im already dead
since your tied up here
I'll put a bullet in my head
I hope you see it all
I hope the pain endures
then you"ll know the venom
from which there is no cure
the portal of these memories
like you trapped me in
and then your life of hurt
will hopefully begin
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by InnerBeautyQueen on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 10:24:33 PM AEST
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| dark... very good job |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by BrandySwanson on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 10:27:46 PM AEST
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when you said dark you weren't kidding. sounds like your out for revenge or something.sorry thats just my opinion very emotional write well done
Brandy |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 10:30:02 PM AEST
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wow, yea that was very dark yet very compelling I enjoyed this a lot...it had your emotions come out so vivdley I loved it...dont do this...lol keep your head held high...
much love,
Dani
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by shelby on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 11:06:55 PM AEST
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you werent kidding with the word dark here Im sorry that your so hurt but please dont for real do these things your life will end up worse.
Michelle |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 11:10:04 PM AEST
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| as always interesting, intriguing, and excellent. what happened to your consideration? sometimes words arent enough. but actions are too much. would you really want to be forever bonded to someone who didnt care enough to listen to what your heart felt? |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by xXxFaygoFetishxXx on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 11:39:15 PM AEST
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Wow. I can definitely relate.
I've felt that way before, about someone who never cared for me.
Always feeling the pain and wanting them to know what its like.
I love this poem.
Amazing write.
::Elizabeth:: |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 08:24:00 AM AEST
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i love dark poetry... this is great
pixie xx |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by MDodgen on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:03:41 AM AEST
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| your words flow very beautifully here, dark and graphic. good job. 4 stars |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by arden on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 10:41:23 PM AEST
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oh my god... powerful, awesome, amazing write. i was in awe throughout the whole poem. your flow was flawless. wow... i loved it. dark and chilling. greatly done.
keep up the amazing writes.
Arden |
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Re: I wont go on without you
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 10:43:25 PM AEST
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You're dancing on that line between dark and disturbing here, holder. Phew! This one's a little tough to read. *BIG sigh*
Oh.... I do get it.... I do understand why you'd right it... but, OUCH, you know?
Wishing always that your heart knows peace,
SNM |
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