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Would you notice?
Contributed by
holderofthestone
on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:56:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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If you and I passed by eachother, would you notice me?
would you notice the way my eyes sparkle?
or the majestic prescence I have?
would you notice the way my smile shines?
or how it brightens the room?
would you notice how I simply take your breath away?
how my laugh seems like sweet music?
would you notice the overwhelming feeling to care for me, or just to be near me?
or how you would be willing to do anything for my attention?
I wonder if you would notice all these things in our quick passing?
In this moment, our brief second near eachother....
but most of all I wonder if you would notice...
this is exactlly,
what I notice about you....
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holderofthestone
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Re: Would you notice?
(User Rating: 1 ) by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:01:10 AM AEST (User
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This is so sweet, holder! I love the flip flop at the end... very creative! |
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Re: Would you notice?
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:01:48 AM AEST (User
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sweet, so much transpires in a moment, one never knows... hugs n' love, nessa
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Re: Would you notice?
(User Rating: 1 ) by Living_In_My_Dream on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:49:16 AM AEST (User
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wow, very big change...from the oast few days...I loved this...it was beutifully seet and emotional...I my heart sank I got butterflies in my stomch...that girl is special...I love this...5/5 materpiece!!!! powerful...
much love,
Dani |
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Re: Would you notice?
(User Rating: 1 ) by MDodgen on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:38:06 PM AEST (User
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you have this way of making a girl feel so special, needed and wanted. this poem is sweet and beautiful. great job, sweetie. ; ) |
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Re: Would you notice?
(User Rating: 1 ) by brigitte7735 on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 02:01:34 PM AEST (User
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This is so breathtaking, i love it!
Vanessa ( 090404 ) |
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Re: Would you notice?
(User Rating: 1 ) by SweetRhythm on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:21:16 AM AEST (User
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Very powerfull & captivating, extreamly sweet! Nice write, good work |
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Re: Would you notice?
(User Rating: 1 ) by Calista on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 01:38:56 AM AEST (User
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this is adorable and real, kudos.
~Calista |
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