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I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
Contributed by
Living_In_My_Dream
on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 10:55:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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you just leave
forget about me
or try...
all you did was cry, cry, cry, cry
because you wanted me
you wanted us to be
and when it was...
you left
you knew what I would do
you were well aware
you know this isnt fair...
who cares
I cant take it
I wouldnt be me if it werent for you
so what am I without you
before I was nothing
now your ripping my soul out, my heart
Im non-existant
just lay me down to rest
I'll take this blade
and slice one deep
and just watch the bleed seep, seep, seep
It drips to the floor
a reassuring smile traces across my face
this is it...
my life, I did not waste
my skin turns pale
my fingers are stale
does it happen this fast...???
thank god I'm dead at last...
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by waos on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:13:50 PM AEST (User
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i don't really know what to say, but i enjoyed reading it. take care hun |
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by slackoffsamiam on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:20:15 PM AEST (User
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lots of emotion, i like that, i truly feel the anguish. nice poem
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by corrupted_minds on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:34:37 PM AEST (User
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You commented on my work and told me to read some of your and i have. I think we write very much on the same wave length. I feel for everything that you write like there is a connection to the words you write. Keep on writing and i'll keep on reading, dont stop writing. |
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:39:03 PM AEST (User
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nicely done. I know alot of people feel this way sometimes, but its always a tough read. you have a talent, it would be a shame to see it wasted. great job. A++++ |
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by loveisendless on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:21:04 AM AEST (User
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A RUFF KIND OF LOVE~IF IT'S JUST A POEM!
GREAT WAY TO WRITE IT THOUGH!! GIVING OFF MORE THAN IT SEEMS,I CAN SEE WHAY IT WAS WRITTEN BY:
Living_in_my_Dream !!! YOU'RE A GREAT WRITER!!!!
DAN!!!!! |
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 09:17:45 AM AEST (User
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I am so sorry for your pain hun, thanks for sharing it with us all, takecare
Pixie xx
great poem. |
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by rugby_player on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 01:38:53 AM AEST (User
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chalk up another for you. Good job. I wish i wasn't blocked write now so maybe i could write something half ways good and see what you think. but i enjoy reading your stuff..and i love when you tell me i have another to read you stuff is great it gives me something to look forward to |
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Re: I wouldnt be doing this if it wasn't because of you
(User Rating: 1 ) by pyrofairyburning on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 09:48:23 PM AEST (User
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I hope your talent never runs dry. I'm am trully astonished by your work. You have such a place in your mind to make raw and pure emotions into words. Even if one hasn't felt some of the issues you deliver, one feels it through your poetry. ÏѧÞήÀtÌØÑ£ |
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