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WoRTHLeSSLY BLeaK eXiSTaNCe
Contributed by
xslashxprettyxskinx
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Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:15:25 PM in AEST
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hbadday
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She took a step back to reveal her weakness
Let down her walls so she wouldn't miss the view
Allowed it all to slip through her fingers for way too long
Disguised each expression of guilt with an "I never do".
Faked a smile to avert attention
Painted over the dullest razor blade scars
Gave up all her childhood innocences
Packaged up her pride in little baby food jars.
Thought she knew what would be coming
Just knew she had life all figured out
Took the lowest possible road in drenched bleakness
Forgot all the good she dreamed about.
Told each stranger as they passed
All a brand new liars tale
Sat in a cold and broke field of loneliness
Hidden are the bruised wings from when she fell.
Graced the covers of magazines
That only she could read
Flattered the world with her marvolous sob stories
Watched in amusement as their eyes would bleed.
She knew all the consequences of her dishonesty
Never allowed anyone to lend that helping hand
Drifted aimlessly from man to man
Drowning in her self-made pool of grief and demand.
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Re: WoRTHLeSSLY BLeaK eXiSTaNCe
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:34:25 PM AEST
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beautifully written as always, lindsey, so full of honesty, vivid images and style, loneliness emanates here, yet i must say i disagree with your note, im your friend bozo lol, big huggies n' love, always nessa
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Re: WoRTHLeSSLY BLeaK eXiSTaNCe
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 10:02:56 PM AEST
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This is absolutely striking. I am completely blown away by the verse below:
Faked a smile to avert attention
Painted over the dullest razor blade scars
Gave up all her childhood innocences
Packaged up her pride in little baby food jars.
This screams honesty... it is littered with powerful, creatively expressed emotion. Incredibly well done!
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Re: WoRTHLeSSLY BLeaK eXiSTaNCe
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by TheSchroedmeister on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 11:53:11 PM AEST
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I can feel the speaker's pain as it is described, I'm glad I glanced upon this one on yet another mindless, late night scroll down the YDPC home page. Your writes are always worthy of anyone's time.
And I hope tomorrow is better than today, for what it's worth..:) |
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Re: WoRTHLeSSLY BLeaK eXiSTaNCe
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by brigitte7735 on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:42:19 PM AEST
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It really shows, Its extraordinary, i really hope you feel better
Always,
Vanessa ( 090404 ) |
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Re: WoRTHLeSSLY BLeaK eXiSTaNCe
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 11:38:45 PM AEST
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You express yourself with such originality that the emotions become new to the reader - I love your choice of words and description.
Really great - |
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