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[title] => When It Comes
[time] => 2004-06-12 11:13:16
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[bodytext] => Pressing up against my skin
It pushes hard, forcing through
Relentless, it has come to me again
Screaming, suddenly, it debuts
In a heartbeat, it is fully there
My complete attention it implores
For me, it seems, it does not care
Wicked, insisting, wanting more
I have no choice, but to succumb
I give myself once again to it
And simply wait until it is done
I its victim, though I feel unfit
Pressing up against my skin
Not externally, but from inside out
I surrender to poetic thought again
Letting it, the poem, break out
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When It Comes
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:13:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Pressing up against my skin
It pushes hard, forcing through
Relentless, it has come to me again
Screaming, suddenly, it debuts
In a heartbeat, it is fully there
My complete attention it implores
For me, it seems, it does not care
Wicked, insisting, wanting more
I have no choice, but to succumb
I give myself once again to it
And simply wait until it is done
I its victim, though I feel unfit
Pressing up against my skin
Not externally, but from inside out
I surrender to poetic thought again
Letting it, the poem, break out
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Re: When It Comes
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by Archie on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:18:44 AM AEST
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| An idea at birth not forced but from the heart, great write. |
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Re: When It Comes
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by pixie on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:34:09 AM AEST
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Trully great write
pixie xx |
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Re: When It Comes
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by DragonLuvSong on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:38:47 AM AEST
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| i think this is so great, writing it is a birth of your ideas, i think you conveyed it well. |
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Re: When It Comes
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by yellow_sundragon on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:40:58 AM AEST
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Funny... I never thought of writing poetry in that way... but it works....
Your poem.... has a... I don't know, almost desperate feel to it (in a good way) I like it. It draws you on....
Jaime |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 12:23:13 PM AEST
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| the feeling this gives is spine-chilling...i love it! lol |
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Re: When It Comes
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 03:11:09 PM AEST
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this is brilliant!! i totally relate lol, hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: When It Comes
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by brigitte7735 on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 07:18:32 PM AEST
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Absolutely sensational, as always
Always,
Vanessa ( 090404 ) |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 09:49:05 PM AEST
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Yes, this is very much like the way it works. Like an insistent lover that won't let you be until you give to the need.
Rita |
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Re: When It Comes
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by RockNwhls on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:44:26 AM AEST
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fantastic!! that is exactly how it is. sometimes i feel like that guy in Alien in the diner!!
scarlett |
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Re: When It Comes
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by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 02:34:00 PM AEST
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| deep silent.... I love it! this is a grabbing piece. I enjoy the words you use, they flow great! unique approach towards write about poetic thoughts... sometimes I feel poems in myself the same way. great great great poem !!! A+++++ |
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Re: When It Comes
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by alecfernadez on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 03:39:49 PM AEST
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| this is in an incredible write which all poets can relate to and should cherish, as it beautifully explains the power of releasing a thing of wonder as a poem |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 01:14:19 AM AEST
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Excellent piece! *applauds*
Nice twist. I didn't know what it might be until the end. Well done.
Andrew |
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Re: When It Comes
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by MDodgen on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 03:12:48 PM AEST
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| wonderful imagery. writing is like that sometimes, so much pressure building up. unitl it forces it way out, great write. |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:37:23 AM AEST
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Wonderful. I know the feeling. Stop resisting.
Stitch |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 08:20:45 PM AEST
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Very clever! I actually read it twice to get the full effect.
Nicely done!
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Re: When It Comes
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 05:17:49 PM AEST
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Again wow. I had no idea what to expect, from the beginning. The end was sensational. This was very well written. You have a great talent, SNM.
Lindsey |
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Re: When It Comes
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by ShadowDaughter on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 04:14:07 PM AEST
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*applauds appreciatively*
Worthy of the honor of being written by you, SNM. A beautiful poem-- 'tis lucky for the rest of us that you surrender so ^ ^.
--Nora |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 02:35:33 AM AEST
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How is it that try as we might ... we cannot change what we are, or ignore it for that matter ?
Minstrels, bards, and sages are we
With voices inside that must be free
Be it by fate or some decree
We can not escape our destiny
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 12:46:31 PM AEST
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| You never cease to amaze me! |
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Re: When It Comes
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 07:26:30 PM AEST
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| Very well written and stated!!! You have definitely captured what it is to read great poetry; including yours. |
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