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[aid] => mick
[title] => Fine Take It
[time] => 2004-06-04 11:03:56
[hometext] => People never leave until you care about them and sometimes they leave so quickly....
[bodytext] => Well I guess it's true.
When it rains
It most definitely pours.
Can't ever stop it.
It just won't let up.
Why can't I just
Sit down and cry.
Can't stop anything,
Not one from leaving,
Couldn't stop sickness,
Can't stop something
If you're not even there.
An accident happens.
Only thing that you may
have changed
is laying next to that person.
Another walks out
of your life.
So say goodbye
try to shed a tear.
Too bad you
are unable to cry.
I think that it's time
To just go back to bed.
I'll wake up later
and hope it's better.
Sadly when it rains
you know that it pours.
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 201
[topic] => 32
[informant] => Black13
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 25
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 0
[associated] =>
[topicname] => SadPoetry
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Fine Take It
Contributed by
Black13
on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 11:03:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Well I guess it's true.
When it rains
It most definitely pours.
Can't ever stop it.
It just won't let up.
Why can't I just
Sit down and cry.
Can't stop anything,
Not one from leaving,
Couldn't stop sickness,
Can't stop something
If you're not even there.
An accident happens.
Only thing that you may
have changed
is laying next to that person.
Another walks out
of your life.
So say goodbye
try to shed a tear.
Too bad you
are unable to cry.
I think that it's time
To just go back to bed.
I'll wake up later
and hope it's better.
Sadly when it rains
you know that it pours.
Copyright ©
Black13
... [
2004-06-04 11:03:56]
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Re: Fine Take It
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 11:13:52 AM AEST
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you know what's sad Jeff?
that this is so true.
especially your note at the start.
i llove the way this starts and ends the same.
good write.
hope you are ok.
*hugs* phil xxx |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by purplestary on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 11:20:52 AM AEST
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| great write....it's so true. |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 11:55:35 AM AEST
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Jeff . . .
There's nothing I can say here that won't seem ludicrous, idiotic, and almost crude in the face of this poem.
. . . and to label pain as a good write, whatever . . . no. Not gonna.
So I just offer my silence . . . bless, Jeff.
*hugs, whether or not it's appropriate and whether or not it seems silly next to this poem and whatever or not he wants/needs a hug*
--Nora |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by pixie on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 11:57:21 AM AEST
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This is so true,you have a great talent, keep it up ((((HUGS))))
Pixie xx |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 12:07:17 PM AEST
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I can relate to this in so many ways my friend.
Excellent write
Larry |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 03:10:50 PM AEST
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((((((((Jeff)))))))))
Jenni |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by venkat on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 12:29:34 AM AEST
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We know we can't stop the down pour of rain..yet our hearts cry for the sudden sad happenings...one way this poem touches
my heart..principal lines I can relate..
venkat |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 12:39:38 PM AEST
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aww jeff... beautiful outpouring of emotions here... your author's note is so true it's scary sometimes.
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Re: Fine Take It
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by TwEeK on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 07:26:53 PM AEST
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oh yes, so utterly true
you speak great words my friend
tweeky |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by MoonlitAngel on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 01:24:34 PM AEST
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... Or is it that you don't care about them until they're gone? I dunno, I think it works both ways. This echoes so loudly of my own life right now...
~ Moonlit |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 03:57:54 PM AEST
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There's really nothing in this life that we as desiring human beings can hold on to. A grievous truth to accept. Most of us never do - we just try to put ourselves in situations that ara safer from loss. But it is a truth, and a lesson to be learned.
Not that this mitigates the pain, but then, it is good to know it is not your own fault.
Take good care, Jeff.
Andrew |
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Re: Fine Take It
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 03:03:13 AM AEST
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Black... You are so right. As soon as you care whether or not they stay or go, they almost always definitely...go! Why? Thank you for sharing.
Lindsey |
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