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i tried
Contributed by
shorty_52
on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 02:23:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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wise old woman
of younder grave
will you bring back
the one i tried to save.
it's probally hard
i know it will be
to bring someone back
who wasn't ment to be.
i tried my hardest
it just wasn't enough
he shot himself twise
strainght into his heart.
he wasn't as tough
as he led me to believe
cause if he was
he'd still be here with me.
as i quit talking
my sobs finally come
when a tear rolls down her cheek
it was the first time she had cried in a million weeks.
she didn't have to say anything
her answer was plain to see.
i say i'm sorry
then walk away
though i soon realize
it wan't my falt.
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2004-06-02 14:23:10]
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Re: i tried
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by youlied on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 02:57:41 PM AEST
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| This is sad, and well written...I like the realization at the end. |
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Re: i tried
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by alecfernadez on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 03:11:20 PM AEST
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its a very sad poem, and it unfolds beautifully, well done.
I noticed a few typos, but enough said of that. It was well written |
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Re: i tried
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by Vermillion on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 06:23:55 AM AEST
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a very powerful poem written from a very poetic mind.
~vermillion~ |
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Re: i tried
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by deadbloodyrose on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 05:26:39 PM AEST
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| very touching emotional poem.. nice piece. AMI JO |
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