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Array ( [sid] => 49252 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => GOING UNDER [time] => 2004-05-26 20:24:14 [hometext] => ever go back to read ur stuf and think it completly sucks. well this is what happened with this. i wrote this a week ago, tell me what you think. [bodytext] => YOU DISPLAYED
GOOD TRAITS THOUGH FEW
THIS DISEASE
KEEPS PULLING ME DOWN
I REALIZE
I CAN’T TRUST YOU
YOUR SUCH A COMFORTABLE LIAR
TRYING TO BREAK THROUGH
INTO MY SOUL

I’M FALLING FOREVER
THE PRICE I PAY
FOR BELIEVING YOU
YOUR DISEASE
PASSED ON TO ME
NOW I LIE CONTINUOUSLY

I THOUGHT
TIME ALONE WOULD TELL
NOW I KNOW
YOU’RE SO MUCH MORE THAN HUMAN
AND BECAUSE I WON’T CONDEMN
DISPOSABLE MEN
AND BECAUSE I CAN’T WITHSTAND
THE SUFFERING THAT’S KEEP INSIDE

I WISH I HAD YOUR FAULTS
NOTHING SEEMS TO PHASE YOU
I CAN'T KEEP GOING UNDER
I CAN'T BELIEVE IN MYSELF ANYMORE
BEHIND EVERY LIE THERE'S A BURDEN

AND BECAUSE I'M RESISTING YOU BUT
STILL DROWNING IN YOU
YOU SCREAM
WELL GO ON AND SCREAM AT ME
I WON'T BE BROKEN AGAIN
I'VE GOT TO BREAK THROUGH
THE SURFACE SEEMS SO FAR AWAY
I'M FALLING AGAIN
UNDER YOUR SPELL. [comments] => 3 [counter] => 167 [topic] => 13 [informant] => thegurl [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )

GOING UNDER

Contributed by thegurl on Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 08:24:14 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

YOU DISPLAYED
GOOD TRAITS THOUGH FEW
THIS DISEASE
KEEPS PULLING ME DOWN
I REALIZE
I CAN’T TRUST YOU
YOUR SUCH A COMFORTABLE LIAR
TRYING TO BREAK THROUGH
INTO MY SOUL

I’M FALLING FOREVER
THE PRICE I PAY
FOR BELIEVING YOU
YOUR DISEASE
PASSED ON TO ME
NOW I LIE CONTINUOUSLY

I THOUGHT
TIME ALONE WOULD TELL
NOW I KNOW
YOU’RE SO MUCH MORE THAN HUMAN
AND BECAUSE I WON’T CONDEMN
DISPOSABLE MEN
AND BECAUSE I CAN’T WITHSTAND
THE SUFFERING THAT’S KEEP INSIDE

I WISH I HAD YOUR FAULTS
NOTHING SEEMS TO PHASE YOU
I CAN'T KEEP GOING UNDER
I CAN'T BELIEVE IN MYSELF ANYMORE
BEHIND EVERY LIE THERE'S A BURDEN

AND BECAUSE I'M RESISTING YOU BUT
STILL DROWNING IN YOU
YOU SCREAM
WELL GO ON AND SCREAM AT ME
I WON'T BE BROKEN AGAIN
I'VE GOT TO BREAK THROUGH
THE SURFACE SEEMS SO FAR AWAY
I'M FALLING AGAIN
UNDER YOUR SPELL.

Copyright © thegurl ... [ 2004-05-26 20:24:14]
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Re: GOING UNDER (User Rating: 1 )
by TheVoice on Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 08:49:34 PM AEST
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sucks? not hardly! i felt myself losing the ability to breathe, drowning with you. stand tall and break free!!

Great write.

the voice

Re: GOING UNDER (User Rating: 1 )
by Rylo on Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 09:02:33 PM AEST
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This would sound a lot better coming from Amy Lee, but thanks for the read.

Re: GOING UNDER (User Rating: 1 )
by katyqueen35 on Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 11:12:57 PM AEST
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sounds sad to me.be stronge and stand tall.
good write.

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