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Array ( [sid] => 49040 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => deep inside [time] => 2004-05-25 11:24:30 [hometext] => and in this world i was born into servitude and solitude [bodytext] => my soul screams in its sorrowful agony
and though this knife tears me open
my soul wont abide and be silent
this pain is more than I can bare

I’m so numb inside but I’m breaking
I keep looking at my wrists daydreaming
of how easily the knife would slide across
how easy would it be to pierce my heart

it was not as easy as I had thought
I bled but I expected the knife
to cut and pierce far easier
the way it does when used on someone else

actually doing it was easy
it was almost surprising to me
the pain was washed away too quickly
maybe deeper next time.... maybe deep enough

I’m broken though...
I couldn’t take the screaming
I still cant
yet on the screaming goes

each time it has gotten worse
if it doesn’t stop I’ll end it
its ripping me apart farther
the hole.... it grows

I can hear it screaming.... [comments] => 7 [counter] => 236 [topic] => 13 [informant] => Black13 [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )

deep inside

Contributed by Black13 on Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 11:24:30 AM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

my soul screams in its sorrowful agony
and though this knife tears me open
my soul wont abide and be silent
this pain is more than I can bare

I’m so numb inside but I’m breaking
I keep looking at my wrists daydreaming
of how easily the knife would slide across
how easy would it be to pierce my heart

it was not as easy as I had thought
I bled but I expected the knife
to cut and pierce far easier
the way it does when used on someone else

actually doing it was easy
it was almost surprising to me
the pain was washed away too quickly
maybe deeper next time.... maybe deep enough

I’m broken though...
I couldn’t take the screaming
I still cant
yet on the screaming goes

each time it has gotten worse
if it doesn’t stop I’ll end it
its ripping me apart farther
the hole.... it grows

I can hear it screaming....

Copyright Â© Black13 ... [ 2004-05-25 11:24:30]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: deep inside (User Rating: 1 )
by jaavys on Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 11:29:52 AM AEST
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it's a good prose, a little morbid, but good. I can actually feel the flesh give way. now to the therapy of writing, write happy thoughts and happy you will become.

Re: deep inside (User Rating: 1 )
by LiquidChaos on Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 11:30:02 AM AEST
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I can hear it too as you've captured the emotion beautifully. I too feel this way and the reason it's so much harder to cut your wrists than slice someone elses is because you weren't meant to hurt yourself that way. So don't. Reach out. We'll be here to help you.

Great write!

Addie

Re: deep inside (User Rating: 1 )
by Luinil on Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 01:37:58 PM AEST
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i can relate to what you're saying, don't give up and keep writing. your emotion shows in your words very well

Re: deep inside (User Rating: 1 )
by Stitch on Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 03:45:54 PM AEST
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This isn't what I was expecting. It's powerful...open...like a dark chasm and the wailing comes out of it. I'm searching for words here. The knife is interesting...so much more concrete than pills or cars. The lethalness so obvious and yet the decision teeters on the edge of the blade.
Stitch

Re: deep inside (User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 12:18:20 AM AEST
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awesome man less poetic than most of your stuff, but sometimes just a good fresh rant is good for our collective minds. I do have one suggestion however. I think the line "yet on the screaming goes" should be changed to yet LONG the screaming goes. Seems more creepy and final to me.

Bobo (Joel)

Re: deep inside (User Rating: 1 )
by apollo on Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 02:48:46 PM AEST
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this was amazing. it truly burned images in my mind of a gruesome a sight that can be. you put this in such a way that makes me want to scream! it was beautiful though in its own dark way.

Re: deep inside (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 12:39:59 AM AEST
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very powerful, dark, suicidal cries.looks as the hole itself is screaming while it expands
awesome write. venkat

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