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[title] => I Envy You
[time] => 2002-10-08 15:15:00
[hometext] => I edited my origional version...it has the same verses but slightly rearranged to improve the flow To be able to write and never have to go back and obsess would indeed be Heaven...
[bodytext] => In honesty I envy thee
You write right from your mind.
Your thoughts provoke each bold pen stroke
Leaving limits behind.
Easy to some comes true freedom
Their spirit they express
With a pure voice they do rejoice
While others just obsess.
Truly, I swear, I am aware--
Free's concept I can grasp
And if I could I surely would
Break free my mental clasp.
In spite of might I am bound tight
Shackled by boundaries.
To become riled, let words run wild
Would set my soul at ease.
The constant beat of measured feet
Flow easy to my mind,
But works of art straight from the heart
Have emotions entwined.
I've learned to cope with braided rope
Of thoughts that intertwined
But look closely and you shall see
My sanity unwind.
Never ever can I sever
Such sturdy cords I made
Raging oceans of emotions
Have left me too afraid.
Vibrant colors like no others
I never dare to use.
Even in dreams it always seems
I view in single hues.
To clearly paint without restraint
And write the way you do
Would simply be Heaven for me!
In truth I envy you.
Yvonne Denise Springer
Copyright ©2002 Yvonne Denise Springer
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I Envy You
Contributed by
springchic1979
on
Tuesday, 8th October 2002 @ 03:15:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
MiscPoems
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In honesty I envy thee
You write right from your mind.
Your thoughts provoke each bold pen stroke
Leaving limits behind.
Easy to some comes true freedom
Their spirit they express
With a pure voice they do rejoice
While others just obsess.
Truly, I swear, I am aware--
Free's concept I can grasp
And if I could I surely would
Break free my mental clasp.
In spite of might I am bound tight
Shackled by boundaries.
To become riled, let words run wild
Would set my soul at ease.
The constant beat of measured feet
Flow easy to my mind,
But works of art straight from the heart
Have emotions entwined.
I've learned to cope with braided rope
Of thoughts that intertwined
But look closely and you shall see
My sanity unwind.
Never ever can I sever
Such sturdy cords I made
Raging oceans of emotions
Have left me too afraid.
Vibrant colors like no others
I never dare to use.
Even in dreams it always seems
I view in single hues.
To clearly paint without restraint
And write the way you do
Would simply be Heaven for me!
In truth I envy you.
Yvonne Denise Springer
Copyright ©2002 Yvonne Denise Springer
Copyright ©
springchic1979
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Re: I Envy You
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 8th October 2002 @ 08:06:15 PM AEST
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Excellent writing ... you have obviously edited well :)))
I like the message behind it, because in the end you really do write in the way the poet you envy :))) |
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Re: I Envy You
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by springchic1979 on
Thursday, 10th October 2002 @ 01:44:57 AM AEST
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Thank you kindly for the wonderful compliment, DreamWeaver, but I fear that even though I can keep rhythm and rhyme...I lack emotions in most of my writings. I have seen some brilliant works where the poets are able to unleash their heart and soul...and I often wish I were one of them...
Yvonne |
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Re: I Envy You
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by Carrie on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 12:07:41 AM AEST
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| Therein lies the cunundrum, to edit or not to edit. To allow free spirit among our words is to preserve the natural magic within us. To exercise restraint and to let go at the same time. It is difficult for those who are more ruled by the mind than heart. But your words are no less perfect when chosen carefully. There is a cerebral magic in that kind of writing. No less amazing to me! |
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Re: I Envy You
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by springchic1979 on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 12:37:15 PM AEST
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I really appreciate your kind words, Carrie, thank you for taking the time write. :)
I think you explained it very well... and I am looking forward to that day when I will stop obsessing. (I am still editing poems that I had written years ago. LoL)
Yvonne |
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Re: I Envy You
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by fancyface4898 on
Monday, 10th March 2003 @ 09:16:05 AM AEST
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| nicely writen...you did a good job |
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Re: I Envy You
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by springchic1979 on
Monday, 10th March 2003 @ 05:13:51 PM AEST
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| Thank you fancyface4898 :) |
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Re: I Envy You
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by wolfflow on
Monday, 17th March 2003 @ 09:14:28 AM AEST
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| wonderful verse, i wish i could write so well |
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Re: I Envy You
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by springchic1979 on
Thursday, 20th March 2003 @ 12:29:25 AM AEST
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You DO write beautifully Wolfflow. I honestly enjoy reading your poetry.
Yvonne |
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Re: I Envy You
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by SuicidalSon on
Monday, 5th May 2003 @ 11:27:47 AM AEST
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I would like to know what poet you envy so much to worry about your own words. You should leave one poem alone when it is finished and move on to another because usually when you write it is the way you feel now and when you read it the next time you may not feel that way. Keep writing you are good.
S.S is J.F |
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Re: I Envy You
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by springchic1979 on
Wednesday, 7th May 2003 @ 09:05:08 AM AEST
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Thank you SuicidalSon, I appreciate your comment. :)
I don't know why but even though I hate obsessing...I find myself unhappy with my poetry unless I do....and the obsession has gotten worse over the years! LoL
Yvonne
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Re: I Envy You
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by Sinned on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 07:07:30 AM AEST
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springchic1979
This is a wonderful write.
Words are missels of our thoughts.
Who you envy I'll never know.
Your words are targeted very well.
I understand the message that you send.
Thoughts seemed muttled deep within.
Fear not you are talented with your pen.
Please please write again.
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