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Untitled
Contributed by
Black13
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Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 11:57:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I'm sitting on my bed and theres nothing left to fake.
Kinfe in my hand with demons in my head, and it's more than I can take.
Said you were leaving so I cried myself to sleep.
But my heart didn't break until the day I couldn't weep.
For all the times I shined, maybe now you'll see that I was weak.
I try to explain though I really shouldn't speak.
And need I remind you we've been through this before?
But I guess you drew a line and headed for the door.
All I ask was it worth it to hurt me like this?
I mean from my pain did you find some bliss?
With no escape, only turbulance, my life
now seems to be fillied with too much strife.
And I'm left empty, screaming into a hole that was my soul.
I never would have guessed your heart was as black as coal.
Confidence of my incompitence convinced that I always fail.
No words seem to work and my love is left to feel frail.
Time seems slow for me; it's time to face the facts.
Never seemed to care about the way your lies impact us.
I'll just sit and cut myself into oblivion;
as my heart turn hard and cold as obsidian.
Copyright ©
Black13
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2004-05-14 23:57:15]
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Re: Untitled
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by venkat on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 12:29:40 AM AEST
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| your feelings well expressed.. venkat |
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Re: Untitled
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 12:30:14 AM AEST
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Yeah, like that will solve it all and make life better. Get your head out of your a$$ man and live. Life goes on with or without us. Might as well stay and make everyone else miserable too! j/k, just my sick sense of humor.
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by SocialMisfit on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 12:36:16 AM AEST
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| i feel your pain through this poem nice job |
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by katyqueen35 on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 01:07:16 AM AEST
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how sad.
Been there before know how you feel.
nicely done on the poem. |
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Re: Untitled
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by arden on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 04:57:45 AM AEST
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well i can relate to this.
nicely expressed, very sad.
well done.
Arden.. |
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Re: Untitled
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 15th May 2004 @ 08:47:57 AM AEST
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i can see your emotion in your words...
i also can relate to this.
great write,
phil xxx |
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Re: Untitled
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by JennyFruFru on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 12:51:23 AM AEST
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| so sad and painful... please stay strong....... |
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Re: Untitled
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by Stitch on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 08:07:31 AM AEST
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You got a deep breath out of me on this one. Aside from a few spelling things, I can't find anything wrong.
"And I'm left empty, screaming into a hole that was my soul"
That's my favorite line. A very strong write.
Stitch |
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Re: Untitled
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by AnGeL_M on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 01:22:47 AM AEST
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Your True Emotions Really Shows In This Write !!!!!!!!! Well Done :-)
******LoVe**AnGeL******
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 09:20:37 AM AEST
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| Very touching... |
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Re: Untitled
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by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 31st May 2004 @ 10:17:50 PM AEST
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Ugh. Sometimes I think you've wormed your way into my head. Scary thought. Great write though, obviously I like it.
~ Moonlit |
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 01:53:14 PM AEST
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Excellent portrayal of feeling, again. And I like the rhyme scheme.
May the sun shine upon your path.
Andrew |
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